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Option one /word phrase
In order used.
Tainted remnants of yesterday, frozen between syllables,
waltzing through echoes, framed confusion,
spoken in vain, shimmering in silence, in silken wishes,
layered consciousness, hearts afire, dreaming love to life,
forbidden burst of blue, hearts don't lie,
Only in dreams, as stars softly fade, petal down.
In a list
A contest entry
- For The Creative At Heart...... by poet2angels.
725 points, ended June 24, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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that is amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!
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congrats well written
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Very nice use of the phrase bank here. You have created a piece of longing amongst the wreckage of love; lovely piece. Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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Wow!!!
What a stunner this is You have taken the word phrases and with your special gift of creativity really made a specatular poem!
I loved every word of this and had to go back several times and just drink in the beauty of this one my friend
Best wishes and already a winner in my book.
Warmest blessings!


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Oh My ~
Each line was so thought provoking Hun ~
I have found your writings to be taking on a
different color as of late ~
You are becoming very artistic with
these *Banks*
Such wonderful structure ~
Presentation is Superb ~
Theme is unique ~
Love it all ~
I could have cut & pasted the parts I liked
the best....but it would be the whole write ~
The best to you in this contest ~
Bear ~


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Very Creative!!!
Wow Tearz, you have penned a very lovely and heartfelt poem. I enjoyed reading this morning.
. You have penned some amazing imagery. You take care, Sandy
Best of luck in the contest, it should do very well.
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This is so poignant. I love it.
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nicely written
you have some very nice imagery and word usage in this penning "masked in silken wishes of retreat",and "Lost within your eyes of forbidden burst of blue". I liked those the most very nice.

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beautiful!
What a beautiful poem!
You have made excellent use of the phrase bank...Actually you cannot even tell that one was used. It flows naturally, and the imagery is wonderful!
Lynda


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wow girl
this is one of your best ive read in a while.....speaks clearly and decisively daunting...and as the willows branches weep the heart of her sings a love song......forever tears
Love the writing and the words penned from heart
Mal

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Such a poem, filled with supplied words from a word bank, you have crafted a bittersweet poem of first love. The heart's cry speaks out in this one, as the poem reflects back on the love that once was.
layered consciousness, hearts afire, dreaming love to life,
forbidden burst of blue, hearts don't lie,
Only in dreams, as stars softly fade, petal down.
This is so good, it pulls at the strings of the reader's heart, O Wonderful Poet.

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You've performed a feat of poetic magic weaving these phrases deftly together into a wonderful tapestry.
A really terrific read. Best of luck in your contest!
David

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Absolutely magical I need say no more,
I LOVE IT













