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The Last Words

Hello for the last time.
You left for eternal rest.
My tears have dried,
your roses are dead,
destroyed with salt.

You taught me so much,
my passion, wisdom, my honor.
I pondered over these words to you.
Here is what I say.

You were my father,
my savior,
my hero and my law.

You held me,
you hurt me,
you told me why you had to.

You taught me,
you scolded me,
you tried to make me strong.

I hope your proud of me.
I love you dad.

Author notes

This is just what I wish that I could say. I miss you Dad. I always will.

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  • poetic-enigma21
    July 6

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    nice... very touching , dad is someone who teaches you the ways of life and loves you no matter what...

    thanks for sharing
    cheers


  • Janetheplain
    July 1
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    Doesn't really relate to the song at all doll.

  • cliche
    September 1, 2008

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    I cannot personally relate to the deep emotion of this poem, but today is the second anniversary of the passing of my best friend's mom. I know that this day will always be bitter sweet for her.
    For me the most powerful line was the first. It spoke so much to the pain of letting go, of acknowledging that they have passed. Thank you.

  • Anno
    August 26, 2008

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    Dads, love, them, love to hate them, but love them we do. This was a very touching and heartfelt poem, which I could definitely relate to on so many levels. All I can say is that some days are better than others in terms of missing or longing for your Dad, but I know it worked for me, write about it. Thank you for taking the time to share with us, superb read.


  • Walls-within
    August 7, 2008

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    This is a very strong worded poem, with deep emotion. I can tell, just by reading this poem, that you really do miss your dad. The words are powerful, and the emotion is amazing. Great work on this one.


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    July 12, 2008

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    This poem made me teary eyed and envious all at the same time. I have only met my father one time in my life and he shows no signs of wanting to create a relationship with me. I am glad that you have that kind of father in your life to build you up and make you strong. Great read. ~mandie~


  • e m i l y
    June 4, 2008

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    Sadly I cannot connect well with this poem.
    It has such strong words and it makes me
    feel bad that I can't like my own dad.

    But you did such a great job.
    He must have been a good one.

    -Emily


  • ItalianRebelRoOcker
    June 26, 2007

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    Awwwwww......this is such a sweet poem.KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!

    ~Tia~

    GOD BLESS


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    June 16, 2007

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    This is brilliant. Its such a powerful poem with so much meaning for you that shone throughout this. It was such a pleasure to read this. WEll done for such a wonderful write.


  • Game Master
    June 16, 2007

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    Awe, that was so cute. I love it, I know that your dad feels the same way. I love it good job bro good job


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 15, 2007

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    So beautiful

    Oh the scrapbook of wisdom passed on through experience does buffer the soul when one so loved is lost. I hold my memories so dearly


  • aboomer silver member
    June 14, 2007

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    Love your wording and the depth and feeling in this. I am in the midst of losing my dad - and it is rough and an important part of my life that can never be filled by anyone else. It will be a long time, I think, before I can say.."My tears have dried, your roses are dead, destroyed with salt."


    • Sonofdead
      June 14, 2007
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      I lost my dad over a year ago. I still feel it. He was taken by a very cruel person, and the sudden and unexpected loss I think will never completly fade. Thank you for the wonderful comment.

      Knapp


  • Desire gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    Oh My Word!!


    This is one Touching piece that penetrates to the core
    Certainly can feel the emotions You pour from
    Your Heart!!
    Thank You for sharing this Gem
    in honor of a Gem
    What an Honor to read
    Thank You for reading my piece and commenting!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • WishMeAway--x
    June 11, 2007

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    You held me,
    you hurt me,
    you told me why you had to.

    You taught me,
    you scolded me,
    you tried to make me strong.

    I hope your proud of me.
    I love you dad.

    -i'd love to say these things to my dad sometimes, it just seems so hard to you know. especially to there faces.

    wonderful hon.
    ♥


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    June 11, 2007

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    Thank you so much for your entry! Best Of luck to you in the contest!!!
    Love and Peace,
    Azlyn


  • the-gifted
    June 11, 2007

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    aww that is sad but a very emtional and deep poem and very good. i love it. i am sorry that you miss your dad so bad. but great poem. your dad is probably very proud of his son.

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