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Addiction Fades Away

Open my eyes to a brand new day
So much to learn and more to say
Life is more than shades of grey
Please give me a reason to stay
Hoping as addiction fades away

It's hard I know, but so worthwhile
I don't need this shit to smile
The anger inside has become hostile
I'm the one who's still on trial
Learning to walk that extra mile

The life I've led I've left behind
Insanity's not what I hoped to find
My dreams are no longer undefined
I have to keep an open mind
Goals that must be redefined

Silver linings to every dark cloud
Promising this time to make you proud
Standing alone, I'm lost in a crowd
My alter ego has been disavowed
Running from myself, I scream aloud

I know this might sound cliche
I'll get down on my knees and pray
I hope that we can meet halfway
Avoiding the pain of lifes disarray
Watching as addiction fades away


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I chose option 1 ,as this is personal

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  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 1, 2008

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    Quintet rhyme!!!!!and used to tell a big and personal story, wonderful. Superb read, greatly enjoyed by both of us. You clearly have a lot of rhyming talent. We both hope you will be joining us in round 10.
    Jeff and Sue


  • kvwriter silver member
    January 25, 2008

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    Personal? Wow. I'm impressed. Not just by your poetic prowess but by your incredible determination to master life and living and not let it master you. I'm sure, at times, you do feel alone. But you're not alone. And, it's okay to pray. You are empowered. Manage this your way and let it work. Good for you! You sent "addiction" packing. You have arrived. Thank you for courageously sharing a part of yourself. Very much appreciated. Fight the good fight! See ya around. Be blessed.--Kel :


    • Billythekid
      January 28, 2008
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      Thanks for your comments and kind thoughts.
      It's a struggle everyday to try and stay away from that crap' but it does get easier.Thanks again and take care.


  • Three Doves
    August 22, 2007

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    Addiction truly is the Devil's only friend. Great expression with such a personal piece. Thank you for entering my contest. Many blessings to you and good luck in the contest.


  • Dageek2
    August 15, 2007
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    Very nice! Good luck in the contest~

  • Mercury Rising
    July 6, 2007

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    I really liked your use of mono-rhymes in each stanza and the message of how life is better with substance abuse. Thanks for entering my contest, and best of luck.

    David

  • SandraMVeinot
    July 6, 2007

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    Good for you if the addiction did fad away...good for you!

    and the flow is nice too...
    and thank you for sharing with us your viewers..

    and all the best to you; love!

  • piccola silver member
    June 13, 2007

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    this is great. I see some spelling errors or typos, but other than that I really enjoyed it. thank you for entering.


  • PrincessOfLostHope
    June 11, 2007
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    Love it

    I love this. It's very poweful.


    • Billythekid
      June 11, 2007
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      Thanks so much. This is more of a sort of autobiographical thingy.


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    June 11, 2007

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    Interesting poem with each stanza as its own monorhyme.
    Would like to see more showing and less telling.


  • Wearychild
    June 11, 2007
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    Oh and the last line of the 3rd stanza i believe you meant "must" I don't know, just giving you a heads up.

  • Wearychild
    June 11, 2007

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    I hope you win the contest. This poem is beautifully written. You are an awesome poet. I am speechless, I love the whole entire poem. I'm gonna go back and read it again. Thanks for sharing and good luck again!

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