~*~
It was
not long ago,
you stood gazing up at
me, now years later, I'm in awe
of You
~*~
Author notes
A
Cinquain
Syllable count:
2-4-6-8-2
Dedicated to my Oldest Son,
John Madison Shaw Jr.
He is leaving for the Marines BootCamp
July 23rd ~
He graduated last week as 1st LT.
from ROTC, and was the most highly
decorated Cadet in 14 years ~
Tonight, June 14, 2007 at
4:30 pm Pacific time I will
be watching him recieve his
diploma from High School ~
Gotta go now & change clothes....
....I have two hours to get there!!!
Gosh.....I'm so frikkin happy right now!!
~ Dad loves you Johnny ~
Roooaaaarrrrrrr!!!!!!!
A contest entry
- Another Five Lines or Less by Heavenly Angel.
750 points, ended June 20, 2007, 26 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congrats on Silver ~ Well deserved~ I didn't see your write before the judging ~ This is really AWESOME! nice job!
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Congrats on the silver! This is such a gorgeous cinquain and your Son must be so proud to receive it ... you sensitive bear, you.
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Expressive...
This is just wonderful bro, and very Arkbear of you to feel this way...your son is now a young man and I feel your pride through heartfelt words
Gorgeous picture btw
~Lilac
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Lilac ~
My Sweet Sis~~
Thank you for the lovely review
I am in New Mexico as I type this ~
Headed to Arkansas...Texas...Arizona....Oklahoma...and of course...New Mexico ~
Had to find a Hotel with Internet..
I will be on from time to time on vacation for the next 2 and a half weeks...hopefully every evening ~
Thanks again for the Spotlight and for being YOU!
SMILE!!
Brother Bear loves You!
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3 claps...9pts
Lionsloves Lair
~Lilac
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My Dearest Uncle,
Had to stop again! After my busy two days.....LOL. A beautiful grandson and my graduating from high school, needed a reminder as to why I keep pushing my boys daily to do their best! LOL Again Congrats to you and your son for the fine accomplishment!!!
Love ya
Nyetta
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A lovely heartfelt write and presentation. Skillfully crafted cinquain. Good flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. You tenderly express your love and admiration for your son in this piece. Congratulations on raising such a fine son. Good word choice. Nice assonance. Best wishes in the contest.
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This is very touching and hits the emotional gut. Your image is a wonderful addition complimenting the overall mood of this poem. I can tell you are such a proud father.
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Beautiful !
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Fantastic!!!
Brother Bear,
You have said sooooo much in sooooo few words! You show papa's pride very well! We all tend to brag about our kids now and then, and you must be very proud of your son. Congratulations on his graduation. Best of luck in the contest! Keep your pen flowing!
Brother Cat
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Really beautiful. This brings to mind my feelings about my precious children.
Congratulations on raising such an outstanding young man!
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I think this way of my niece. She's only 4 but I'm amazed at how much she's grown in so little time. She's the first child I've watched grow from birth and I am just in awe of her
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FG ~
Thank you for reviewing this piece and sharing a part of your love about your Niece ~
Yes.....they grow up soooo fast ~
God bless ~
Bear ~
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A beautiful tribute to your son. How quickly they grow. My daughter just served 6 yrs in the Navy and I am still beaming with pride.
I wish you luck Johnny..and you have a great dad.
Good luck.
Soulful Woman
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Thank you SW ~
You should be VERY proud of your daughter ~
I also served in the Navy, aboard a Carrier, the USS Saratoga CV-60, now decommissioned ~
Is she going to re-enlist?
Bear ~
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awwwwwww this was so sweeeeet left me looking at it for awhile, thank you for sharing this delight with us
you big bear
Love and Light
Frozentearz
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Thank You Tearz ~
I saw this picture and just had to write something about it ~
Such innocence....such beauty in the Form of a child ~
Give it 13 years...
J/K
Thanks Shey....been missin ya Hun ~
Bear ~
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Spectacular Read of Fatherly love
You could not of said it any better then this, I will keep your son John in my prayers while he's in the USA forces. I know you are proud of him....excellent write of love........novy
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Thank You Novy ~
All prayers are welcomed ~
A child will forever torture us with their plans....ideas......careers......and GIRLFRIENDS!!!!!
AARRgghhhh!!
But....our love must be unconditional ~
That's why I love him so...
Thanks my Friend ~
Bear ~
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Absolutely wonderful.
Bear He is Beautiful. I know you must be so proud of him. Congratulations to him on His graduation. Great tribute to a wonderful son.
*Go with God* my Friend,
Valerie
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Valerie ~
I have missd you ~
I took your advice about losing my witness ~
I got rid of my Group *Gay BearCage* and made some Major chnages in my thought process ~
Thank you for your kind review on this Poem....and thank you for reminding me of what we are here for ~
God bless Dear~~
Bear ~
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Congrat
Congratulation to your son.. I do wish him the very best in the Marines...
Yvonne
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Thank You Von ~
He is a Fine Young Cadet.....I believe he will be in Gods hands and covered in the blood of Christ ~
Missing him will be the hardest of all ~
God bless ~
Bear ~
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Oh Bear!! This is SO beautiful!! Oh gosh, I have tears in my eyes. What a proud papa. This is Golden!! Best of luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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Thank You Jeannie ~
My Son is an incredible young man.....it's really gonna be hard to see him go after his dream.....but that's what we're here for.....to support our childrens dreams....no matter how scary they may be ~
God bless Hun ~
Bear ~
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awwww that is beautiful Bear!! Just beautiful! Actually beautiful doesn'tgive it justice...But it's the only word I can think of at the moment. =)
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Thank You Butterfly ~
As a Father of two boys, this won't be the first tear I've shed.....the youngest is a year younger to the day and he wants to go into the Navy ~
I support them both either way ~
I think not having them at home will be the worst ~
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You're welcome dear!
And it wont be the last either sweetie!
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Oooh Rah Devil Dog...!
Congrats to your son. I thought this was beautiful.
You remember him looking up to you, Sounds to me as
though the shoe is on the other foot now.
Mia
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Mia ~
Oooh Rah!
Thank you for making me smile over this poem ~
I couldn't believe how many tears I shed in just 5 short lines ~
God bless ~
Bear ~
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My Dearest Uncle,
Our kids, goodness, My middle boy graduates from high school this weekend and my oldest is gonna be a daddy this week. I am beaming with pride at the thought! I can truly relate to how you must feel at the moment! My oldest is trying to save enough to open his own restaurant. He loves to cook. My youngest, wants to be a book editor or journalist...Such high ambitions..
Anyways, enough bragging, LOL. Congrats on your son's accomplishments!! And best of luck in this contest!!
Love ya
Nyetta
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My Dear Niece ~
Nyetta ~
Your words are very soothing with such Love for your children ~
Yes.....our kids are the gems we can't afford...
But I'd got to the ends of the earth to make sure they were safe, fed and loved ~
Many thanks to you Hun.....enjoy this busy week you have coming up!!
Take LOTS of pics!!!!
....and brag allll you want....you deserve it!!
SMILE!!
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My camera is poised and ready! How many times in one's life do they have a baby born and a high school graduation all in one week? LOL I know what you mean, I have gone hungry before just so my boys would have enough to eat. But that is a long time ago. I am hoping to be able to put a pic of the new grandbaby on here for a while. (If my camera works, that is, it is new so it should.)
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This is....wow!
I can't type a decent comment as I'm trying to read/type through the parental tears that are flowing
Aren't our children the most awesome gifts???
This is a beautiful write and I thank you for sharing this! Congratulations to your son; I know you're a very proud Dad
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Thank you Sis ~
Tears came very quickly while penning this ~
I have never been more Proud ~
Thanks for this Contest Hun ~
Brother Bear ~
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