This is my collapsing lung for easy breathing
As if the air could be any lighter (and the sun any stronger)
This is my relapsed mind in centered dreaming
As if the water could be any colder (and the clouds any higher)
We have become some colorful kingdom in some queen's seam(less quilt).
Author notes
Dream in color.
A contest entry
- Another Five Lines or Less by Heavenly Angel.
750 points, ended June 20, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Your poem amazed me. Your skills are incredible. I hope to one day be half as good as you are. Keep on writing, I love to read your poems.
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mmmmmm
rings with an after-thought. short and sweet and bright, a sharp gem in a dark cave. just enough rhyme for flow, but no redundancy in pattern.
"This is my relapsed mind in centered dreaming"
5 lines to perfection
cheers
tala
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nice
as usual.
many times i feel like that. well, not exactly, because i didn't write it, so i don't know the exact feelings... felt, but that's what thing i love about your poems: the [okay, this is going to be a stretch] interpretability. there *phew* :]
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Very nicely done...
Very creative and unique; I like that!
Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest! All the best
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