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To Hell And Beyond: Part 1

You hold my hand, close and tight
It just feels ever so right
You keep me warm on this night by the fire
I feel our love will never tire

Months have passed, now I'm cold
As if I have lost my heart and soul
Now why do I completely freeze
With just a simple, gentle breeze

Your body has swiftly disappeared
Are you ever to come back to me here?
I look through the blinding storm
And see you keeping someone else dry and warm

And when the moon has given way to sun
I am now the lonely one
My friends try to break down the wall
But all I ever do is fall

I go to a meadow and find a piece of glass
As I look over my depressing past
I sigh and put the shard to my wrist
Of the hand you held on days like this

As I lay and blood trickles from the spot
I suddenly am very hot
Is that you with me again?
No, it's just Satan's Hellish den

The heat engulfs me, I try to sleep
But the only thing I do is weep
And I look over the fiery pond
And think, I'm alone to Hell and beyond

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  • Repetitious Chaos
    January 30, 2008
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    Thank you for your entry and good luck in this contest!


  • innocence jaded.xx
    August 27, 2007

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    Ooooh ! I really like this :] Ahmazing! The rhyming was good, too.

    "Months have passed, now I'm cold
    As if I have lost my heart and soul
    Now why do I completely freeze
    With just a simple, gentle breeze"

    Those lines really stood out to me for some reason. I'm not sure why, but they were definitey very powerful!
    Sorry it took so long to comment this. haha
    Thanks for entering and good luckk !


  • everthesame
    July 18, 2007

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    this is so sad i loved it though it was a very depressing read for me great write and thank you for your entry


  • On Frail Wings.
    July 9, 2007

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    i really like this one. good luck and im adding you to the finalists. and bythe way, i can relate completely.


  • Nephalaneous lover
    June 22, 2007

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    wow, absolutely wonderful, loved the format, loved the little rhymes, loved the whole piece in general.
    this is an awsome write, thank you for entering.
    good luck in my contest


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    June 19, 2007
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    This poem was so amazing loved it! good luck in my contest! and thanks for entering

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