You watch him fade this past year,
Hiding all the pain and fear,
Staying strong, yet inside weak,
Mask the tremble as you speak.
Hoping for a better day,
Some way, some how, make him stay,
disguise the hurt in your eyes,
As Angels prepare the skies.
Holding hands, is such a task,
One more good day is all you ask.
Precious are the moments few,
Thinking how you'll make it through.
Years of planning, now shattered,
dreams of tomorrow, tattered.
Only yesterdays left now,
bitter tears you'll not allow.
The last breath, leaves broken hearts,
As his tired soul departs.
Leaving behind a lost fight,
To roam in angelic flight.
Now tears fall from clouded eyes,
All thats left are sad goodbyes!
Angels wait to take him home,
Leaving broken souls to roam,
Author notes
Well for those who have been bugging me to write something. It needs some work to it, but there ya go
Natalia x
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That was a really touching, beautiful poem. Great job!!
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wow, this is a really beautiful poem!
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oh wow, this one turned out just beautiful Natalia. You have such a way with healing and understanding through your words. This is well done, comforting and has such a slice of heart in it. I really adore this, just lovely hun.
Gypsy
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Wow this is lovely, and sad. Beautiful chick!
whisper
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I tried to edit my mistakes there but this crappy laptop won't let me, though today is one of those "I don't give a flying fuck days"......so I'll leave it as is....good to see you writing again sweetheart X
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Smelly? Smelly????? Aimee told me ya know , She was laughing her head off.........she was relaying the conversation whilst I soaked in a glorious bubble bath! She told me to sign to read...
Anyway...
About time you posted something, it's been too long. Death...not a pleasant prospect Nat, but the only thing in life we can be sure of I s'pose. This is a bleeding pice of narrative, and every reader will relate for a variety of reasons. Because we know it's inevitable eventually, because rarely do we know the exact moment, because the older we get the more aware we become of it's silent presence, because when we do lose someone it hurts like fuck....this conveys incredible sadness and desperation...it's the same theme as Nick Drake's song 'JOEY'...
Emotive words. Encore encore...ie.gizza another one!
Sorry, it's been a long long week.........
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I don;t think it needs work, I like what it represents and the way it flows telling a its own tale,
A joy to read and thanks for sharing,
Love and Light
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this one is a bit of a heartbreaker isn't it? this poem was very sad and deeply touching. Thank you for sharing this lovely piece of poetry, and have a blessed day
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nice job...!!
like it very much...!!
i like the simplicity of words n the fact that u rhymed..!! big fan of rhyming here..
from the title to the last line i feel everythin is just right!
well done...!!!
Ruu!
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Beautifully written, and a poem that those who have had to watch a terminally ill friend or loved one should read...Scott
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ZOMFGPOPSICLES
That was so reaching. It remionded me of my bestest friend.
That is definatly going on my faves. Thank you so much for uploading.
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This was outstanding, I loved it! Loved the flow and the message within the lines are gripping. "mask the tremble as you speak" really grabbed me! You really penned a beautiful and moving piece. I could feel this poem and your flow helped me on the journey. This should be in a contest! My pleasure to read, excellent work ~Tia
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