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i suffer from your touch.

You reach into my womb
You steal the life hidden there
Your hands tear at me
Your fingers poke me
Your nails tear my flesh

I gave you my all
I gave you life
I gave you my essence
I gave you my heart
I gave you beauty

My wounds never heal
My body is wrecked
My soul is dyeing
My time is ending

Still you
Drill for oil
Rape the land for gold and gems
Cut down the forests
Kill all my beloved creatures

Man o man
When will this madness end.

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  • Hiddenspaces
    June 20, 2007

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    a good write pat.you cut to the bone of man's conscionse(SP?)(i wish more people could realize what they are doing) like he does upon the mother earth.good job and good luck
    blessings,
    H.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    I love the picture, in all the mist,
    the hotair balloon is still beautiful as can be.

    Your words run deep, makes the reader think.
    I like that. Great job...

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    June 11, 2007

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    So I went and looked up the pic. This is a great write...goes so well with the picture. And this kind write, speaking the truth of the current treatment of our Mother is right up my alley. She is crying out...yet the mega-wealthy ignore her suffering. Great job here.
    Love,
    Az


  • Kari gold member
    June 11, 2007

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    This is filled with lots of emotion right on. You've done a great job and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!

    - KariKaRama -


  • Tattboyspet
    June 11, 2007

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    You have hit home with this message - you have stripped the niceties from 'Man' and cut to the bone by writing these words ... well done - excellent poem!


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 11, 2007
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    wow, powerful, intense words felt here...well done, best of luck!


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    June 11, 2007

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    Pops, this is a brilliant take on the picture I saw it, saved it and then wrote for another one in this same contest. There are a couple of typo's in stanza 2, but a re-read will sort those and L13 "dying"
    Other than those little tweaks, this is good Thank you for sharing. Love ya. Laura


    • patsoldcat
      June 11, 2007
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      thanks

      i did use spell check but have was correctly spelled. LOL
      and dieing was spelled right. LOL
      thanks for the help.
      can you link me to your poem?

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