I wish I were dead
All the truths unsaid
Don't care about me
Look away but wonder why I bleed
They wonder why I scream at night
Life gone from my body, gave up on the fight
They honestly don't know why I'm filled with delight
Death finally came, you said I wouldn't, you weren't right
Tears silently falling
And I'm still not sure why I'm drowning
Deeply sleeping, unable to wake
Until my whole world started to shake
Everything fell through completely
I'm finally waking up, still sleepy
trying hard to open my eyes
Trying hard not to cry
Crying blood tears
Drawn out from all the haunting fears
That follow and chase me
More potential that you won't see
You throw out your insults, accusations made
You still don't notice how my life constantly fades
I'm the old photograph pinned to the wal
Constantly waiting for my world to fall
Echoes screaming from the past
They are just that, they never last
Another chapter dissappears
Once again, calling on fears
Watch me walking the rain
It falls so that you can't see my pain
But I want to-need to- start to feel
Pain, the only thing that's truly real
Author notes
I wrote this a couple months ago and I'm just posting it now. I also drew alot of different things by different stanzanas on the paper I wrote this on.
~Lost Night Shadow
[but shh...dont tell her...]
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Wow. This was a very intense poem to read; it confused me and dizzified my mind and I LOVED IT!!! The words were so beautiful and intense and they sucked me right in. "Death finally came, you said I wouldn't, you weren't right" ~ very intense, unexpected, and really attention-grabbing. "You throw out your insults, accusations made / You still don't notice how my life constantly fades / I'm the old photograph pinned to the wall / Constantly waiting for my world to fall" ~ beautiful, intense, wow. "Echoes screaming from the past / They are just that, they never last / Another chapter dissappears / Once again, calling on fears" ~ wow again! "Watch me walking the rain / It falls so that you can't see my pain / But I want to-need to- start to feel / Pain, the only thing that's truly real" ~ I can relate to this so strongly...Great rhyme as well, and now I'm just rambling. Fantastic piece!!!
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wow...
great job on this!!!
"Deeply sleeping, unable to wake
Until my whole world started to shake"
amazing lines!!!!!~Jen
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well, it hit home with me.
♥.love.
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The expression is great and the symbolism is fantastic. I would love to see what you drew on the paper
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Made me think!
Jennifer... I really like that line with the photograph pinned to the wall. Very fine metaphor! I hope you are having a good summer.
If you are ever bored, contact me, okay? 
Melodies ♥
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I really like the first stanza. The implication that others see you in pain yet turn away. Very heartbreaking. On a side note, you may want to proof read for a few typos.
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Thanks for letting me know..I'm usually not very good at that.
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