Motherfucker-Go-Round
Break the World
And watch it die
Under the lining
Of a silver satin sky
Incongruous thoughts
Drip scum and mud
Wrath’s violent lust
Cause fear and blood
Welcome to the Motherfucker-Go-Round
It is a never ending ride
On the walls you can scream and pound
But you’re locked in and cannot hide
I’ll be your guide
Fuck you all
And fuck your dream
The attention whores
Operatic scream
Anarchy signalled
Your last defeat
Watch! Gather round!
Take a seat!
Welcome to the Motherfucker-Go-Round
Just ignore the dreadful reek
I hope that you have realised
We deal in pain you may not seek
I’ll hit your peak
You can’t justify
I know your sins
I stalk this ride
With evilest grins
You typecast as victim
You think I care?
I’m Ringmaster here
With a sexual glare
Welcome to the Motherfucker-Go-Round
You’re trapped until the end
Go cry me a river
No hope, no love, no friend
I’ll be your godsend
Cover your ears
From the pounding theme
“Motherfucker-A-Go-Go!”
The singer screams
You think you had
A hope in hell?
Avoiding for long
This padded cell?
Welcome to the Motherfucker-Go-Round
Your heart sinks like lead
If it’s a consolation
You’ll soon be dead
I’ll paint you red
Author notes
*"PHANTOM OF DESPAIR" - To comply with contest rules*
Had to use the alternative title to this, as I wasnt sure if I could put obscenities in a title. Its real name is, "Motherfucker-Go-Round" and is written as lyrics.
This came from an unfinished piece that I did several months ago that was 3 verses and one line, that one line being "Welcome to motherfucker-a-go-go, baby!" and it seemed to have a far more anti-corporate, globalisation and conformity theme.
However, re-reading it this morning, something else came to me and I used it to do a major re-write and take it in a completely different direction.
If I remember correctly, at the time the original part was written, I was listening to Rob Zombie, so there was a heavy influence of that in it, this one though seems to have shades of ICP in it.
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This feels so angry and bitter, that it almost shocks the reader and makes them want to recoil. I love your imagery here though and how you talk of the way the world is a perfect disgrace.
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Thanks, I really wanted the lines to give this one a real snap to it's anger. It really is a big FTW piece.
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wow this poem fits into so many of my options,you did an amazing job with this peice here!it was morbid and i love that in a poem,lol.but anyways like i said this was great and i would love to read more some time in the future.
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Thank you very much. This piece had very different origins, but I mostly scrapped the original as it wasn't going anywhere, only keeping a few pieces from it. I far prefer how this one has turned out, a lot more biting and fun.
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ICP all the way
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Thank you. It definately does come across like that, not only in the wording, but I think it's the overall "carnival" theme and imagery that does it.
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Honestly, this would be a lot better if it was 'merry' go round.. instead of mother fucker go round. The childs innocence of a merry go round makes it even darker in this piece. If using the 'motherfuckergoround' it just isnt the same. Other than that.. this is fucking awesome and I love it!! ANd I can definately see an ICP influence in this.
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Thank you.
Yeah, I can see where you are coming from with that idea.
I think the "motherfucker-go-round" really came from the piece that this originated from (which was completely different, was actually called motherfucker-a-go-go), I liked the use and play of the words, thus reworded it for this piece (although I couldn't resist slipping motherfucker-a-go-go in near the end). It just seemed to suit the mood of the whole piece, epsecially with the ICP and Rob Zombie influences seeping into it.
Like I said, I can see how it plays darker with the use of merry-go-round instead. Using Motherfucker seems to play of more as anger than dark.
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