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lost love

I tried to save you

I tried to be the one

but you didn't want me too

 

I watched you drown

I watched you walk away

and with that you pulled me down

 

I couldn't save you

I couldn't stop it

now I'm left without you

 

Your face stuck in my mind

your voice echoeing so clearly

the warmth of your hand still in mine

 

How do I say goodbye

Just let you go

I can't I won't even try

 

So tonight down by the lake

In the darkness

It's my life I will take

 

It's my life I will save

To be with you

This way I won't have to wait

 

Tonight I say goodbye to everything

and say hello to a new life

hoping you will wear my ring

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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I chose option 7, hope you like it

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  • Uniquely-Scarred
    July 18, 2007

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    well played with this one so sad and a beautiful piece, i would be over the moon if i produced something of such quality


  • angelsslayer
    July 18, 2007
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    Beautiful write. The emotions were p[ortrayed very nicely.


  • MeaningfulPoet482
    July 17, 2007
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    This is a delicious read. Good luck in my contest.


  • ScarletO gold member
    June 27, 2007

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    Your poem is very heartfelt and touching. It has a good flow of rhythm. I enjoyed reading your poem very much. But, your background I find quite distracting. I fyou want to use one of these flowers on a black background, I think that would be more suitable and not deter from your poetry. At first, I felt myself just want to click on and not even try to read this. I am sure I am not the only one. I don't mean to hurt your feelings, it is not your poem I am speaking of here for it is very good.


  • Xxthe angry gothxX
    June 19, 2007
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    hmm. lol I did like it. It rememinded me of Open the Door by Evanescence. I'm not sure if you listen to them or not. This reminded me of constantly trying to help out a friend who accepted my help and stabbed me in the back/betrayed me later. ...I thought that this flowed every well. Good luck in the contest.


  • Decorus Somnium
    June 18, 2007

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    A very sad and dark write. Full of emotions and so wonderfuly written. I wish you good luck in the contest.
    Keep writing and God Bless


  • ckwriter69
    June 12, 2007

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    very dark write, but I love the images you have created here. Sad and emotional but with a strong love and a lot of desire to be with him. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. I like the background too Cassie. Keep them coming.


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 11, 2007
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    Bittersweet emotions cry out here..well done..best of luck!

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