how ironic...
they took it as a joke
and didnt really care
they may not have believed me,
but they were always there
every step of the way
thought it was a lie
but they managed to always wipe
the tears that i would cry
*****
Now the others know its true
believed me from the start
but didnt no how to show me
the love within their heart
they can't always be there
when i need them here
to help me see the light
and not have to live in fear
*****
the irony of it is
the TRUE friends try their best
though they don't always succeed
they're not always there
when i am in need
the FAKE friends didn't care
the way i felt inside
but somehow made me smile
when i only wanted to hide...
Author notes
after i had been sexually abused, a group (2 ppl) didnt beelives me but were there still
and who i found out now r my TRUE friends (2 other girls) believed me the whole time, and tried to b there but couldnt b there, and still arent very offten.. i found it ironic n thought id write about it
what do you think?
Please tell me what you think
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Exactly
when i told my friends, only 1/3 believed me, and ive known her the least amount!
strange days we live in huh?
wonderful write -
wow... ggreat job with this... i love it... keep it up
Its very true... the ones who stay there are the ones youd never expect...
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Not bad. Friends are funny that way. Can't tell you how many times I've realized this. The ones that are always there are often just looking for something for themselves and don't want it to be a two way street.
I'd like to see some periods in this and capital letters at the beginning of sentences. If you want a more formal look, formal poems capitalize the beginning line of each sentence also. People are falling away from it these days, but I still do it.
Another tip. Always capitalize the word I. Rule of english and many readers will pass up a piece displayed this way because it shouts out, "immature teenager who's poetry isn't worth reading" and I can tell you right now you don't need that, because this is a nice little poem and you should get all the reads you deserve.
I'm also not sure of the dividers you have in here. To me, the piece doesn't really need to be divided. Each stanza seemed to flow just fine to the next. Better to flow then to chop it up.
Type was a little dark on this background, but not too bad. I might make it white or lighten it up some.
Keep writing.
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You are such an amazing writer, and so astute for your young age! You see things so very clearly. A stunning write, as always from you. A big hug from a distant, AP friend!
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aww thanks alot for your reply! i am very glad you liked this one. i dont like it too much, but i like what its about.
take care,
xoxoxoxoxox
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a friend is some one to bail you out of jail and a true friend will be in there with you saying damn we fucked up a true friend will allwase be there for you a true friend will go threw anything to be ther and make you smile and see the light life is rought around all edges just keep smileing
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thanks for your reply. thats tru....
take care
xoxoxoxoxoxoxox
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A wonderful write of reflection. beautifully written, as you alwasy do.
Gaylene
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thanks alot for the comment! i like to think my poetry is getting better
love you
xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
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it is ironic, how fake friends do make you smile when you want to hide... this poem flows beautifully! and how you bring out the truths of different kind friendships is very creative. i really love this poem! great write!
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thank you for the comment. i am glads u liked the poem, i dunon where it came form i was thinking about it and i started writting and yea lol
take care
xoxoxox
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Wow...I soooo love this write It flows so well. Awesome indeed. Take care my special one I love you shitloads xxxxx
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thanks AP mum, means alot
im very glad u liked it, i think im getting un-writters block now
hehe
love you too
xoxoxox
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This is really interesting.
You brought out some great points
regarding friendship. I do hope
that your friends come around for you
and hopefully they will see what it is
that they are really doing. I think
you did a great job with this one!
Thanks a lot for sharing it and keep
up the wonderful work here!
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thanks you alot for your comment.
take care of yourself
xoxoxox
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