I found the door opened
You showed me the way to this door
So I couldn't think it would offened
If I would enter into that moor inside the door more and more.
I wasn't stopped
I wasn't showed the way out
My dreams were given wings
And I was bound by those unseen strings.
You left the door opened
And only you could keep it closed.
I know my spirits were not forced
to throw myself into that hollow
But my soul wanders and will follow
The unreachable shadow
The shadow that darkens my world by enlightening it.
Author notes
Option 10
A contest entry
- Open Doors by Celticjedi.
450 points, ended June 21, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a very interesting poem to read. I like the repetition of rhymes and the mystical quality of the work. The ending is very nice.
Stanza 2: Instead of "showed" it should be "shown." English can be tricky like that.
~ Joyce
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A very nice poem. I Can feel your sorrow and can relate to it.
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"The shadow that darkens my world by enlightening it. " This line was truly poetic. I love your rhyming
A nice poem overall, well done.
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Wow...completely beautiful...I'm not going to cry lol! This piece is definitely about discovering yourself, but it also has hints of trust, friendship, love and betrayal in it. Fantastic work, keep it up! Thanks for entering!
Luvs,
Cj
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A very good poem.It has the tone of sadness.
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Thanks a lot for commenting.Your comments encourage me most.
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