Falling in love again
was fun with you
my heart sang to the music,
our bodies hanging up-side-down
in the “bat” position
The distance was spanned
Easily accessible conversation
filled our souls with meaning and happiness
until the distance became a tool..
wedged between two hearts to break
Falling now, without a net
truly, without wings
passion, conversation have moved on
I am left, changed for fair and for worse
If I am jaded, I am forgotten
A contest entry
- Another day, another dream wasted... by Nicole Cudworth.
575 points, ended June 19, 2007, 20 entries
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love this
I for one have worked without a net many times and can feel this poem compleatly..... lovely! Kath
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Excellent write..long distance lovers..that can be tough..but im glad you found the one that made your heart sing
..great job!
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Such happiness felt than abandoned. Very poignant write, each lined flowed well into the next.
Avery well written poem. Kelly
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Long distances can make or break a relationship and more often than not, it's the latter that happens. Your poem was excellently written as I could feel the pain with which you wrote this piece. Thanks for your entry and good luck!
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Very Good
Falling now, without a net
truly, without wings
passion, conversation have moved on
I am left, changed for fair and for worse
If I am jaded, I am forgotten
This is so well done
though some will wonder for the Bat Position
I know the feeling of falling, and falling away
Love it
Rick
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