It's not that I don't want you
not that I don't care
When I reach out to find you
seems you're just not there
I grope around in darkness
searching for a light
It's easier in the daytime
why did God make night?
I search then I search again
but all to no avail
Frustration is closing in
can't you hear me wail?
Who hid my teddy bear?
Author notes
Even us grown ups need something to cuddle sometimes.
In a list
A contest entry
- Basically Anything! Come look! by lalaland024.
425 points, ended June 16, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your Best by Black Raevyn.
600 points, ended June 13, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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So cute, really
Wishing you much success in the contest. Loved the sentiment behind this one for sure. And I agree, we grown ups need huggs too. lol
and hugs
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Thank you so much
It took a while for me to work out which direction I wanted to go in but once I did it was easy to finish. You might have realised from what you have read of mine that sometimes I can be a little
Then the serious side kicks in. Sometimes 
sometimes 
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Cute
This is very original, made me laugh at the end. Very well written with a bit of humour.
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Thank you, I enjoyed being part of your contest. Good luck with your writing and future competitions. Your Rainbow Rose is beautiful, I can only give you
to say thank you.
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awww that was so cute!!!!!
I love the last line,
I thought it was a love poem at first!
Awesome write!
Hope u find your teddy bear
Keep it up I looooove this poem!
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Thank you
It was originally going to be a love poem but I had a change of heart halfway through. I wrote the first two lines a week or so ago and left them dangling. At one point I was going to be looking for my reading glasses but that seemed a little too mundane. Maybe with a different background it might have been more open to interpretation. Thank you again for your comment
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hey its a nice one
I liked reading it.. so less yet so more...it conveys...a lot ...yes you are true what u have written in your author notes.. i guess all of us are constantly cuddling up something or the other.. just the nature and character of the "Teddy" as you described in the poetry varies...
Its a well thought and well crafted write..
All the best...
may god Bless you.
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Thank you so much for your comments. I truly believe that if we keep the child within us alive it makes it easier to get by in life. Children look at things from a very simple point of view without the complications that adults bring to things. I STILL love blowing bubbles and watching them float and burst. And I still cuddle my teddy.
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AW MAN
I love this!!! GREAT job and Good Luck in the contest!
"I search then I search again
but to no avail
Frustration is closing in
can't you hear me wail?
Who hid my teddy bear?"
That says it all! I am twenty years old AND I still have Pooh! ^^
He's lost all his stuffing tho ;-; too much lovin' me thinks ;-; But what a way to go? *hugs his Pooh Bear* &-&
Jeff.
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Thank you for your comment Jeff. But how much love is too much for a faithful teddy bear
They never complain, don't tell your secrets and best of all...don't argue back at you
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Mate you know the sock you thought you lost in the wash last week? It is in my gob right now
This is brilliant so much so I am going to promote it somehow. Every thing I said about meter rhythm rhyme you got in an instant here...Happy Trails as I fade off into the distance (on Sliver
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So proud of you girl...I love it!!!
(and that is no frog shite!)
Ya Mate
SHE IS NEW TO WRITING FOLKS!!! (sorry Mags)
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I am blushing
Thank you lovey. This is what happens when I sit around a monitor with my friends on a chilly saturday and listen to what they say. The advice I get and just the things I soak up being with you and Adrian make it happen. I am happy that you are proud of your prodigy Love you
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Well done
Nice one my friend. Great rhyme and rhythm. You are doing really well
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Aww that's so cute I like it. I'm a huge teddy bear person myself. Nicely written. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Thank you. The first two lines were originally going to be a saddie
but decided to look on the brighter side. Still trying to get my head around this rhyming stuff. Good luck with your contest and with your writing.
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