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I Don't Want to Talk About it

I don't want to be the one,
When it's all now said and done,
To fall apart,
You can take it all away,
And leave me nothing more to say,
I can't pretend you didn't break my heart.

If it isn't up to me,
When it's all said openly,
To take account,
You can throw it in my face,
It's not my place to make amends with you,
You see it's not what I'm all about.

[CHORUS]
So I don't want to talk about it,
Yet when you look around life goes on without us,
Seems to me the that things that never change,
Still stay the same so little do they bring,
And the empty feelings left inside,
We can't hide anymore.

I could count down all the times,
When I thought I'd lose my mind,
Without you,
You can turn me inside out then round about,
And cast away the empty shell of me,
There's nothing I could do.

But if I took the time,
And stopped feeding you my lines,
I might succeed,
In the end I might say exactly what I mean,
Without thinking and be seen,
To want the things I really need (but now...)

[CHORUS]
So I don't want to talk about it,
Yet when you look around life goes on without us,
Seems to me the that things that never change,
Still stay the same so little do they bring,
And the empty feelings left inside,
We can't hide anymore.

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  • Midnite-Rae
    July 30

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    "When it's all now said and done," I think you should take out the word "now". It would flow better. I really liked the song, and if you have musical talent or already have music written for this, I would love to hear it."I don't want to be the one,
    When it's all now said and done,
    To fall apart,
    You can take it all away,
    And leave me nothing more to say,
    I can't pretend you didn't break my heart." I love that part. I could definately feel the emotion in this. I really enjoyed reading this. You did a wonderful job. Thanks for entering and Good luck in my contest.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    March 21

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    A fine song/poem of love lost and all the emotions that are associated with that
    Very well done
    Thank you for being part of this contest; good luck!


  • Intricate Wordsmith
    June 11, 2008
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    If you are going to enter my contest I would appreciate it if you would follow the rules. You are lacking in your Author's Notes:
    ~Main Idea of the Poem
    ~Username
    ~Any further explanation as to why you choose that subject (not required, but it helps)
    ~Tell if it is supposed to rhyme or not


  • ellipsist
    January 2, 2008

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    "When it's all now said and done,"

    hmmm... I can't get that line to make sense to me, the phrasing is very awkward... perhaps it should read, "now that all is said and done"

    I especially like the chorus of this song... I like the message of this piece, the sort of self awareness that seems to be arrived at...

  • xTomorrowx
    November 11, 2007

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    This is great, I really like it, it's simple enough that while listening to it as a song you could sing along, but it's different enough to make it interesting...
    Great job, thanks for entering and good luck! =)


  • Tangled Angle
    September 18, 2007

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    Hi, nice song, but isn't what I was looking for with the contest. This doesn't have a complex rhyme scheme and no set pattern for internal rhyme and end line rhyme at the same time.
    Feel free to try again.


  • NickelleteXninja
    June 15, 2007

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    this would make for one hell of a beautiful song


    thanks for entering it was very well done...
    Enter it in the next song contest that you see

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