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Back Stabbing Stranger

Knives in your back pocket

My back stabbing stanger

With all the right lines.

You torture me with whispers

As your breath stays still upon my bones

Paranoia in my flesh.

 

[The crush I wish would fade]

Because

[Stranger you're killing me]

 

Alone by the shoreline

Watching the world go purple

As my heart goes black and numb

Just when I feel you're there watching me.

 

The waves are crushing me

And I know it's you.

 

I casually walk through the lake

Where you're calling me.

I lost control

And desired your play on emotions.

I didn't feel the algea wrap around my ankles,

Nor the leaches sucking my palms.

I swam to you

And forgot the world-

And the fact of lungs.

I drowned for the stranger that loved me

As he pull me under the rocks.

 

Waking up to myself and to the pain

I'm dead with a mouth full of leaches. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Uh, is it scary? Probably not. XD I like it anyway though, because yeah. Falling in love with a stranger and finding out that in the end they would lead you on and then kill you...uh to me, I'd be scared. XD Sometimes it is scary to lose control.

Anways, I wrote this while listening to #1 Crush by Garbage. It's a good song that's about twisted love.

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  • whits end silver member
    July 5, 2007
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    I love it!

    I really captured my attention and I got many visuals in the writing!!


  • WanderingCyclone
    June 10, 2007

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    Good Job chum! Sounds a lot like a song to me. Good write, not quite scary but good anywhoo..good luck