so much pain
so much fear
so much hate for the unknown
so much hate for what seems clear
so much pain
so much fear
so much i hate to hear
i hate the old thoughts
of what i used to be
i hate my past so much
i hate how it made me
its never right to fall
victim to yourself
its never right to fall
victim for someone else
its never ok to be
the flavor of the week
its never right to be
the toy they made me be
its never ok to think
some one like that has your back
its never ok to hear
how they wish to die
cuz in the end it makes you
wish that maybe you could die
its never ok to be
the one they all want
its never ok to be
everything your not
Author notes
#3.
Write about your past. Whether it be good or bad.
for people who know me they know what im talking about
A contest entry
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600 points, ended June 24, 2007, 28 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Wow.........
gahhh, omg
this...has me speechless.
I REALLY loved they wayy it flowed
and how it all fit together so perfectly.
=D it was my pleasure to read this, for sure.
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thanks so much
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its never right to fall
victim to yourself
its never right to fall
victim for someone else
those were my favorite lines. very expressive poem. I loved it
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WOW! Very impressive and well written. I know just what losing yourself feels like. Maybe not in the same perspective as you. But I do know how it feels. This poem had amazing rhyme, amazing form and it really stood out to me. Great piece. Good luck!!!
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thanks greg your comment means alot
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Nicely done.
I like this because the title sets a predetermined place. Yesterday, the past.
It starts with feelings of pain, fear and hate.
Then it evolves into thoughts of what is not right, and what should not be. And this is all good, for these feelings and thoughts of today will slowly fade into memories tomorrow.
I like the last verse as well. One needn't change their self to please others. When we are ourselves is when we find our true friends.
Nice write. Good luck in the contest.
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thanks greg your comment means alot
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this is kool. i like it a lot. i'm impressed at how you expressed your past - very informative.
good luck in the contest Ampd
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thanks babe
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