goddess,
earth mother views
her wardrobe of beauty,
cascading waterfalls are wrapped
around shoulders of pristine palisades,
mirrored mesas shine in wonder
as her breath of pure air
nourishes land,
goddess
outburst,
molten fury
of magma igniting
anger at misuse of her gifts,
exhaust fumes from conceived conveyances
wheel along engraved epitaphs,
leaving a wake of dead,
no response to
outburst
shudder
from inner core
quaking in displeasure
at conceit of the creation,
minds not mastering their own universe,
as goddess holds back vexation
for now, while man’s folly
makes Mother Earth
shudder
Author notes
triple rictameters
graphic: http://i71.photobucket.com/albums/i150/pollycheck/weird/Slide5.jpg
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A contest entry
- Weird Art by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended June 25, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I think that you have captured the essence of this image very well. The image isn't even needed for the reader as you have created a masterpiece with your words that captures the beauty of Mother Earth.
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That such a beautiful form as this could hold such a hard reality check for mankind.Who could blame the Great Mother for such angry reactions You have interpreted this image perfectly Excellent
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Wow! That's awesome! Beautiful ricameters!! I love it! Vivid word usages and imagery. Great picture. I really enjoyed this! Thanks for sharing!
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Wow! Triple rictameters rule! This is great! I loved it! Thanks for sharing and best wishes!
Frogz~
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WOW
Azure, this is fantastic, the descriptive wording and metaphors is simply breathtaking. I love it. Val
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This is spectacular! Very well crafted and submitted perfectly with an amazing picture to offset the piece. Beautifully laid out and I want a copy! xx
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Splendid vivid imagery driving this delightful poem. Your triple rictameters are a joy to read. Well Done!
Dennis :^)
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A very good write and presentation. Skillfully crafted rictameter string. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Good depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice. Good personification of earth of the different aspects of her personality. Strong alliteration. Nice assonance. A most enjoyable read. Best wishes in the contest.
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Great job. Your line breaks worked perfectly and the imagery and alliteration were superb.
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OMG! this is fantastic! Triple Rictameters all penned perfectly with a wonderful connecting image. Well done!
Love,
Amera ♥
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excellent~
An excellent tiple rictameter....I have only did one of these...you have done this in three...sighs....
From cascading waterfalls...to molten fury and Mother Earth holding back in displeasure...
You have captured it all....
Best of luck in the contest.....
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Thank you for your interest in this contest. I hope that you have fun using the following link for your inspiration. Please make sure to either include the picture or include a link to the picture. Good luck and remember above all, have fun and enjoy yourself. Your link is: http://i71.photobucket.com/albums/i150/pollycheck/weird/Slide5.jpg
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