the pearls sewn so carefully
onto the dress
of midnight velvet
and there
in the middle
is the showcase jewel:
the diamond sitting
midst the gold and silver
and there
tied across the middle
is the white sash
of precious silk.
the sky worn
as mother nature's dress
Author notes
Can you see what I'm talking about? Pearls > stars, velvet > sky, diamond > moon, sash > shooting star.
A contest entry
- Basically Anything! Come look! by lalaland024.
425 points, ended June 16, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poets 12&Under by FallingTwilight.
700 points, ended August 8, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Ahh, what do you think?
Comments
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This is beautiful. Great metaphor, or simile, whichever it is. You definetly deserved the trophies!
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Thanks! Metaphor, I'm thinking. But still, thanks!
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Beautiful imagery.
I love the night sky and you've done it justice. Great job and Good luck,
FallenPoeticAngel
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Thank you greatly
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yes, i can actually figure out the elements the moment my eyes fell on the last two lines.. even your title gives the hint.. so beautifully woven... you know, i'd really love that dress! can you get one for me?
i even see the mention of horizons.. dawn at one end, dusk at the other with the "gold and silver".
vry pretty, very descriptive.
i relish your poetry.
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Heh heh- I, too, would definitely fancy a dress like that. And aahh, I didn't think of the horizons...but now that you mention it...
And thank you so very much
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This is another piece to be proud of. Imagination is a pre-requirement when writing poetry and yours is very original and quite amazing,
Good luck in the contest. 
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Thnx so much!!!! (:
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a good piece, i like idea of the sky being mother's nature's even though the sky is often looked as open, aye it can cover too.
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Thanks (: It was fun to write.
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Impressive
Oh i really like this, it's nicely written. A very creative title and poem here. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Great choice of words that pertained to the poem perfectly, and filled with a lot of imagery. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest -
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Thank you so much (:
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