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Lost

The nightmares crept in when I was asleep.
‘Twas the restless thoughts of my losing you;
you gave me a world I wanted to keep.
Then I dreamt it was gone; what I could do?

The dream felt so real that I tossed around.
I began to sweat and shake in my skin,
the dark room was quiet, nary a sound.
I was cold and clammy, drool on my chin.

The dream woke me up and I shook my head.
My hand searched around and what did I feel?
Right there beside me was you in my bed.
My fear then left, it was all so surreal.

My head touched the pillow, I held you tight,
dreaming sweet things for the rest of the night.

 

 

Author notes

By: Amera
This is part of my study in proper placement of Volta.

Sonnet:
Sonnets are formal poems and consist of 14 lines (3 quatrains and a couplet) , traditionally written in iambic pentameter - that is, in lines ten syllables long, with accents falling on every second syllable.
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Laura
    June 19, 2007

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    this has the wow factor. its totally amazing, imagery volcab everything is perfect well done to you xxxx


  • Hetha
    June 11, 2007

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    Incredible!

    Strictly form speaking, you have done very well with this sonnet. Otherwise, the striking reality of the emotions of this piece, moved me nearly to tears! Your choice of evoking certain words to describe these emotions of the fear of losing someone, made me want to crawl right back in bed with my husband and not let go. I could feel this deeply, and have been there myself. Excellent job!


  • Desire gold member
    June 10, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Powerful piece You have penned Form Queen

    What a verse You have done and in a Sonnet~
    Wow!! Felt as if there...
    Oy!!!
    Best wishes on Your study too
    Loved this!!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 10, 2007

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    wow, beautiful sonnet...and yeah I have had dreams such as this where it seems so real, only to wake and realize tis only a nightmare...well delivered Dollface! Good luck!


  • PerVirtuous
    June 10, 2007

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    Awesome. You are getting the hang of sonnets. This one is a beauty. Good thing you don't know all my secrets... Three bunnies!!!


  • StarEyes
    June 10, 2007

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    What a great read this is!!!!!! Sounds like me a few million times! This is great!!!!!! What a fantastic job on this one! Best of luck in the contest!!

    and hey my "bunny fund" gonna get used here, LOL.

    Love ya

    Sunshinegirl

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