All summer long
I had fun!
But i really wish
i had more time in the sun
Even though i have been on the computer
24/7
I just cant wait till my birthday!
And then i'll be eleven
My aunt has a pool
and i like to swim in it with all the time!
It's a blast being with all my friends!
but the bottom of the pool feels like slime
It hasnt even been a month into the summer
and i am having a blast!
whether i am swimming or sitting on the computer all day long
i just cant wait till middle school and to go into my grown up class!
Please tell me what you think
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Very nice. I love summer too...well, loved summer. I am already out of school. I graduated in May. In line 10, you have "and i like to swim with all the time". Did you want "with" there? Or did you forget to put something in?
Keep up the good work.
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wooo!
this one is really smooth cinda!
it has great flow
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