Oh God
please fabricate a ship for you
well in advance
since
very soon you may witness
a gushing flood at your gate
as
my new prayer is conceived
by a drop of my tear
Oh God....
Author notes
Based on a picture...
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2353412
A contest entry
- 10 Lines - Picture Inspired by -LilacThOughts-.
425 points, ended June 10, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - You Are Invited to Attend by Titus.
500 points, ended August 11, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Awesome thoughts put to a write..Such imagery, and creativity in this reverential poem on prayer...Excellent! Bookmarked!
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this is outstanding my friend
i love it
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A beautiful write. Congratulations on winning the Gold Trophy on this one. I noticed you also got an HM. Well done my friend.....Katie
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Thanks again for your words... they always seem to strike a chord that resonates within me...
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so descriptive
so very deep
loved this one
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As an epic writer and preferring myself to rhyme, this is as freshing as you can get for such a small peice, hopefully, I can take those blinkers off and appreciate this refinery.
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No wonder this won gold, a very profound write..I am in awe and mesmorized by your depth.
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Powerful words and imagery here. You've done a wonderful job and very well done on getting your gold shine
Kari
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A lovely piece...
A lovely piece; this is an interesting depiction of God's principle of "Increase"; since God can walk on water, I highly doubt that He could drown (lol) - in any case, I loved the sentiment portrayed. Perhaps He would build a well instead to capture one's tears. --Joe
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look out lord, here come s a flood of tears, such is the scope of the emotions about tbe unleashed... very well done in descriptive and expressive words...PK
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I love this, Dear Prabhu. Our prayers wrought through tears bringing God close to us...Impeccable and irresistable. Of course this is golden and well deserving of this award. Peace to you, Rhonda
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Oh, this is such a sad poem that you have written here. It seems to be filled with all this melancholy and need to get past it all. I know I've certainly had moments like this where I wish it would all just pass so that I can get on with my life and living it. I thought that you did a good job with expressing that feeling.
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The emotion speaks out
~Lilac
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I like this piece a lot. It's simple but holds such a strong emotional message inside. I especially like the lines
"my new prayer is conceived
with a drop of tear"
Wonderful work
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