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Chilled Eye

Icy chills fill my senses
freezing with no flinches,
as dripping tears of frozen memories
pass the droplets of life.
cold exterior motions stiffen the skin
to a permanent frown
frozen days so icy
trickling down feelings die
numb to all
this eye is one.

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  • Peteskid gold member
    June 10, 2007

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    the metaphor to cold represents the isolation anf lonliness of the voice and it is a barrier to everything; a strong narration well done for ten lines...PK


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    June 10, 2007
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    Great imagery thank you

    ~Lilac