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Lover's Call

As Lily laid in her bed
thinking of John, Jim & Ted

Her cell phone began ringing,
but it was more like singing!

She smiled and thought:
“I’d hurry to reply not!”

Ted, as always, will tell me:
“you’re the best, sweetie.”

And John with his smile
tries to flatter me for a while.

Now, how about Jim?
Oh, better reply him.

“hello, hear you.
What did you say, who?”

“No, I’m not your daughter!
You’ve got the wrong number!”

2007-06-09

Author notes

Hope it's what you asked for. If not, it could bring a smile to your face at least, couldn't it?

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  • Ellis gold member
    November 24, 2008
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    Great Fun


  • Abson
    April 5, 2008

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    NICE WRITTEN...

    This is a nicely penned piece of rhymed couplet that delves on the call coming from the persona's three lovers TED JIM AND JOHN.The poem is superior in form,tone,language use and in metrical arrangement.


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    Lol...this was fun Thank you for brightening up my day

    • Ir.muse
      October 9, 2007
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      Glad you liked it. Thank you for the nice comment and applauses.


  • Vernal Bloom
    August 15, 2007

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    how funny you are! Those smilery made me giggle even louder! (my sentence had an araye that I can’t remember. I’ll check and tell you and do not laugh at my poetic sentence, please do not laugh! I’m laughing instead of you!)
    And congratulations on winning another trophy, sissy. If I were the host, I’d give you gold for this poem!

    ~Vernal Bloom~

  • pozo
    June 18, 2007
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    Lol Funny poem Congrats on the HM
    Thanks for your comment
    Pozo


  • Sandygram
    June 16, 2007

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    Wonderful Poem!!!

    Wonderful poem dear niece. Very whimsical and lighthearted. Your contest was wonderful and I thasnk you again for the Gold. It was very appreciated.

    God Bless you, Aunt,Sandy

  • Sandygram
    June 13, 2007
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    Cute Poem!!!!

    Oh yes, we can't seem to get away from all those calls no matter where we are. Have cell phone, will travel. With all those guys you need to see whos calling before you answer. Thanks for the smiles. You take care, Sandy


  • 2lullabyhaven
    June 10, 2007
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    Cute

    This is so cute and funny and true to life as well.
    We do tend to pick and choose sometimes. lol


  • Shakari
    June 9, 2007

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    LOL! This piece was cute....you have a lot of expected GUYS calling you. I'm just kidding! Well, this piece had a catching ending and it flowed quite well. I liked the rhyming and found that there are some new emoticons that I knew not of. Keep up the great work and good luck in the contest!

    • Ir.muse
      June 9, 2007
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      Ok, so it wasn't that bad?
      Thank you. Glad you smiled.

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