Why
did you
crack
the ice?
I don't
want you
to fall
through
and land
in the
freezing depths
that make
frost bite
seem friendly.
Each of your
eyelashes
has their own
personal icicle
freezing your
prying orbs
shut.
You're not
allowed
to kiss
my cracked
blue lips.
You're not
allowed
to melt me
with your
bliss.
I'll just seal
my protective layer
of solid ice
above
your floating
head.
Now you're trapped,
bound
to suffer
this endless
winter
with me.
But as our
blue lips
fumble over
words
we don't have to
say.
The icy depths
begin to boil.
A contest entry
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525 points, ended June 27, 2008, 19 entries
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Comments
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Very romantic and to the point. an interesting write, makes it seem as if you are trying to keep your life away from someone, as if your inner self is so cold and dark that you don't want them to see, you're scared that they'll disappear and never return which is why they get stuck in the ice with you. a very well written poem, everso clever. Thank you for entering it in my contest. The very best of luck to you. xXx
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Best! *
This one is my favorite!!!
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Very Good
I absolutely love this. Very romantic. So beautiful. I love how I can actually visualize what's going on just from your words. It's a great poem. I'm adding you to my favorites! Cuz your great.
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Beautiful work!!!!!!
I love how this poem flowed so perfectly. There is just one small typo on "Now, you're trapped." I hope to read more of your work.
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