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As But Dung

His Lexus and his Mercedes Benz
His mansions and all upon which he depends
His Phd's and social status
His mountain tops and all his valleys

He did exchange all this
for the excellency
Of the knowledge
Of Jesus Christ

Who was wiser than Solomon
Who crafted the ounces, inches, pounds and ton

Paul wanted to apprehend "that"
Which had apprehended
him

His friends, be they great or small
His everything and his all


For Jesus Christ


Who is the lily of the valley
Who dwells in mountains
And in alleys
Bread of life and water too


Jesus
Enabler of all we do
The burning bush that wouldn't consume,
The one who was buried in borrowed tomb
Shepherd of the lowly sheep
Sustainer, reigner, guarantee
of all that was ever promised me

Healer, revealer, returner
Taketh awayer of all sins
lodged inside and lodged deep within

The donkey rider
the true insider
The peace giver and
substance provider

The bright and shining
morning star
That spotlights us just where we are
The keeper of secrets and rewarder of deeds
The bread of life upon which we all feed

Jesus
Light of the world
Light in darkness
Chief cornerstone
In every market

Jacob's ladder
Abraham's sacrifice
King of kings and Lord of lords
Moses' stick and Aaron's rod
Who is the triumphant lamb of God


Lover of my soul
Wiper of my tears
Saviour of the world
Disperser of my fears

Let everything be viewed as dung
For the knowledge of Him and His kingdom's
song!

Author notes

I want to experience this fellowship with Jesus, this is my deepest desire, just like Paul did.


One day I read where Paul who had such status in his day, power and authority, knowledge, had obtained his knowledge from the highest possible sources of his day
and yet when in route to do his thing, was knocked off his high horse by a bright light, blinded so he could see. And he forever more chased that which had arrested his attention, I call it a forever love affair
because he gave all he had for it.

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  • catz Moderators member
    May 18

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    This is a very inspiring poem, so filled with the desire and intent of doing God's work. A poem of faith and knowledge. It's kind of long but the more I read of it, the more I felt compelled to read more. Good job

    Dee

  • ears2hearyou gold member
    May 5

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    I disagree..with the poet below.....

    this is a poem that lists the complete history of our
    lineage boldly. AS we all must do in poetry, lest we
    sacrifice our souls to any new wind that happens to blow!
    My favorite parts were these ones;
    Jacob's ladder

    Abraham's sacrifice
    King of kings and Lord of lords
    Moses' stick and Aaron's rod
    Who is the triumphant lamb of God

    Lover of my soul
    Wiper of my tears
    Saviour of the world
    Disperser of my fears

    These two paragraphs would really make a great song!
    you might have a sonnet on your hands here dear poetess
    of fearless might.
    ears/Seattle


    • 2lullabyhaven
      May 5
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      Thank you so much, I appreciatelol really nice to get your response to this

  • NastyNickie
    April 22

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    wow, this is a very weak poem.... sorry.... i could point out the problems if u'd like?... but that wouldn't be a very fun time...

    . Rewarded 4

  • JWGoethe
    April 22

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    Heartfelt and enjoyable. Taketh awayer? I love it. Bending language to suit our needs is what its all about.
    Bravo

  • lechap
    April 22

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    Interesting

    This is one that I can't relate too. I liked the first few lines, it created an interesting dichotomy between the picture you posted. The rest of this poem speak about a relationship I don't have with an entity I don't believe in. Nevertheless, this poem is one that makes that relationship seem enviable.

    • 2lullabyhaven
      May 5
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      Thank you for your honesty, and for true at this time you may not be acquainted, but stay tuned...you may become curious and begin to ask questions, right? smile

  • Shancy Fayre
    April 22
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    This is a fresh and unique perspective of an ancient belief. I, too, crave a relationship with the One who owns it all. This poem is too great. I'm really not trying to incite pride. Somehow, I don't even feel like I could if I was to try. Thank you so much for featuring this so that I could find this treasure of words. Shancy.

    . Rewarded 6


  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    April 22

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    I like your poem. The content and the form were both excellent. I like the rhyme. The form was consistant throughout. Great job.


  • star-ashes
    April 22

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    wow this is really nice....though it is slightly harsh but you definatly know how to draw people into reading your work
  • Eusebius
    April 22

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    As a believer, I like the sentiment, however, you seem to be slapping folks in the face and smacking them with a brickbat in your lines. A more subtle approach might be more effective as both poetry and evangelization...

    • 2lullabyhaven
      April 22
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      Well, it's not my intention to do so. I hope not everyone sees it that way, because I don't like to alter too much once its down, if you know what I mean.

  • Mirthryl
    April 21

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    Great title, reiterated and expanded in your conclusion. Outstanding "Paul wanted to apprehend "that" which had apprehended him"! Lovely "sustainer, reigner, guarantee of all that was ever promised me." Very nice progression from Paul to the inhabitants of the world, to the intimacy of "Lover of my soul, wiper of my tears."
    Strong conclusion, that the exchange of 'our things'(posessions, habits, sins) for fellowship with Jesus is always a massive trade up! I enjoyed this very much.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    April 20

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    " Lover of my soul
    Wiper of my tears
    Saviour of the world
    Distiller of my fears ".

    That is so beautiful,
    I rather keep all the faith,
    then to have any of the riches.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce

    good luck in my contest.

  • Yemassee silver member
    April 19

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    I don't think I can go to your extreme though I certainly can appreciate and understand the desire for something more than exists here on earth. To feel some measure of peace and exultation, and a feeling of purity...I can understand all that. And of course I wish you the best in that search.


    • 2lullabyhaven
      April 19
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      Thank you...hahaha...you can go to that extreme if you desire to go to that extreme hahhaaha trust me

  • Bon fleur de lys
    April 17

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    Dear Patricia

    I love your beautiful poem, written with the sincerity of a true child of God, from your heart and soul. Your spirit and love shone through for our Lord and Savior, Jesus Christ. Thank you and God bless you always my friend and sister. I'm touched. Amen.

    Peace and love,
    Petratanii xo


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    April 3

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    I really like the various ways you describe Jesus here, much of it in rhyme.
    This one stanza was a bit awkward, though:

    "Healer, revealer, returner
    Taketh awayer of all sins
    lodged inside and lodged deep within"

    a suggestion:

    "Healer, revealer, returner
    redeemer of all sin
    lodged inside and deep within"

    Final word. "come" works better than "song" in terms of rhyme and strength.

    Overall, an excellent poem!


    • 2lullabyhaven
      April 4
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      Thank you for your time invested in my poem, thanks as well for your comments and suggestions-I will look into them along with other suggestions that I have received and perhaps I will make some changes in the near future-thanks again

  • EarthToJim
    March 19

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    Can't believe that out of all those contests this only gotcha one little sickly green trophy... that's sad... must have been some stiff competition.

    Well, nice sentiments... nice easy flowing rhyme, internal and end-line... more creative than much of what passes on here.

    One note on style...
    I don't think the apostle Paul ever had a PhD or a Lexus. I think you are expecting people to understand that the first two, actually three, stanzas refer to one man and then the bit about Paul refers to another.

    For someone unfamiliar with the apostle they'd assume you were just telling the story of some guy Paul right from word one.

    I wonder if a Roman numeral one should lead the first three stanzas and then a II preceding the fourth. Hmmm... I'll IM you my full idea.

  • catz Moderators member
    February 19
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    This is a beautiffuly inspiring poem, and a piece of biblical history as well.
    You did a superb job with this, very well spoken and presented

    Dee


  • EarthToJim
    January 17
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    It Was Reading The Apostle Paul

    that was most responsible for converting me. Christ's repartee with the Pharisees and Saducees is exhilarating, but reading about Paul's complete 180, from persecuting the church to becoming its foremost spokesperson was doubly moving to me. The sacrifice, shipwreck, imprisonment is inspiring.

    • 2lullabyhaven
      January 25
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      Wow, I felt there was more to our connection than just your extraordinary poetry, my, my you just rock...thanks for sharing these comments with me today, they are most delightful to read-this makes you my brother, I am just tickled pink, and happy

  • spanishrose
    January 9

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    Thank you

    Your poems are of great learnng and a place knowledg of sharing the love of Jesus. That in all how we should all want to live our lives like his. And you are right this kind of love is forever love. May your words keep floating like swan on a lake.


  • Swan song gold member
    December 8, 2007
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    This is lovely dear an experience all should desire

  • leander gold member
    December 3, 2007

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    Well, you definately managed to express your feelings and emotions within the lines of this poem here, and I like that

    The write itself, poetically then, seems to be a mix between rhyme and free verse - as if you didn't manage to make your mind how to write the poem in fact... Maybe a bit a pity actually, since the parts where you did rhyme sounded a bit wobbly and here and there forced even...

    but that's just a personal opinion huh
    anyway, apart from that, I really enjoyed this one!

    thanks for entering the contest - I wish you the best of luck!
    Leander

  • leander gold member
    December 3, 2007
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    Well, you definately managed to express your feelings and emotions within the lines of this poem here, and I like that

    The write itself, poetically then, seems to be a mix between rhyme and free verse - as if you didn't manage to make your mind how to write the poem in fact... Maybe a bit a pity actually, since the parts where you did rhyme sounded a bit wobbly and here and there forced even...

    but that's just a personal opinion huh
    anyway, apart from that, I really enjoyed this one!

    thanks for entering the contest - I wish you the best of luck!
    Leander

  • leander gold member
    December 3, 2007
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    Well, you definately managed to express your feelings and emotions within the lines of this poem here, and I like that

    The write itself, poetically then, seems to be a mix between rhyme and free verse - as if you didn't manage to make your mind how to write the poem in fact... Maybe a bit a pity actually, since the parts where you did rhyme sounded a bit wobbly and here and there forced even...

    but that's just a personal opinion huh
    anyway, apart from that, I really enjoyed this one!

    thanks for entering the contest - I wish you the best of luck!
    Leander

  • Swan song gold member
    November 24, 2007
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    Love poem deep and heart felt. well written also A joy to read.

  • Sir Ima Cucumber
    November 20, 2007

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    Know what is important in life and what is just superfical and sham. I agree there for the most part, hard not to agree with love at it's highest degree.


    • 2lullabyhaven
      November 24, 2007
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      Thank you so much for such a superb review, I'll frame it ... smile
  • Napoet
    November 18, 2007

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    One can only wish that all could experience the faith required to follow the example laid before us. This love for not only Christ, but for one another. A truly inspirational write...thank you.

    Napoet


    • 2lullabyhaven
      November 19, 2007
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      Thanks

      Ah yes, if we get the love for Christ straight the other love would naturally follow suit, I think
  • king of kings
    November 13, 2007
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    i like it

  • Knight70
    November 8, 2007

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    a true testament to what is really important in life......

    This is beyond moving. I just adore how you penned this, as well as the profound messages found within the words. Beautifully written!! Knight70


  • EarthToJim
    October 31, 2007
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    Line 9

    You've got a redundancy with "more wiser" -- make it just "wiser" for the poem to read more better!


    • 2lullabyhaven
      October 31, 2007
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      Thank you so much for catching that for me, you have a sharp eye, and a ready wit, awesome combo Oh and thanks for the review, to

  • Bas silver member
    October 31, 2007

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    wonderful

    i like the way you use paul in this who wrote a great deal of the new testament , it's very touching and full of wisdom , the way you use it to gloryify our lord jesus christ , thank you for sharing


    • 2lullabyhaven
      October 31, 2007
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      Thank you, this one is from the heart... and so is my desires that I placed into the note area...smilelol

  • midnight eyes
    October 31, 2007
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    Well done.



    Amber

  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    very good

    How true, people think that all their wealth, power,houses, fame and titles will bring them happpiness but oft they just bring misery and pain. They gain all those things and forget one thing........ They are going to die one day then then what? They shall stand naked and ashamed before their maker with nothing and then all that shall not matter. God bless you my friend, Mark


    • 2lullabyhaven
      October 31, 2007
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      Thanks so much for your very insightful response to this one, my favorite poem of all times....thanks, that is that I have written hahaahaha lol

  • ms-cuddles
    October 25, 2007

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    If only we all could folllow in his footsteps with our all. Being imperfect we fall short. We should never to forget to sing his praises everyday. Thank you for entering this and good luck. Hugs~ Cuddles

  • Lie 2 Me Once Again
    June 19, 2007

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    Great job I've had this on my bookmarks a few days and I really like this poem. Thanks for entering

  • Sonofdead
    June 19, 2007

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    I like this one. I have not been a follower of god in some time, if going to church and praying are what is required of me. I know god is still in my heart though, and I pray that he forgives me for my sins. I can totally understand where you are coming from on this poem, follower of god. May he be with you, and may you never stray from the path.

    Knapp

  • InxomniaXpiral
    June 19, 2007

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    Pretty Impressive

    I really love the way you worded your idea. The contemporary spin in the begining really made your work standout and caught my attention. I am not really into religious poetry, but i really liked how you were simply stating your respect and appreciation, not judging others. That truly is quite refreshing. While i relate to buddhism the most, i can certainly appreciate and respect the awesome archetypes and morals of all religions, and i really enjoyed the message in this piece. Thanks for writing this.

    Lizbian

    . Rewarded 8


  • Amaranthine Lover silver member
    June 19, 2007

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    interesting
    I really like how you
    had the focus of the piece
    nice imagery used here
    and I love the ending
    keep writing

  • Bluebook Pet
    June 19, 2007

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    Such revealing. People today should read this over and over again. There are still many things people think they know but in fact what they know is just apint.

  • tlsledge
    June 19, 2007

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    Very good write. All that Paul had; religious credentials, intellectual superiority, educational benefits, he considered them dung (manure)compared to what he got in Christ.

  • Swan song gold member
    June 11, 2007

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    This is an extremely well written well thought out and excellent write. I can see all sorts of images here most in reference to Jesus but you added some others here and the imagery is great.


  • XanaphiaPepsi
    June 10, 2007

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    I'm sorry, I didn't read all of it because I don't believe in that particular God, but I thought that I should at least comment on it, and not waste your points, sorry, but i thought i would have liked it or it would have made me laugh, because the title looked funny, and now i know what it meant but you never know with people nowadays, so again, i'm sorry, but appreciate your sharing.

    • 2lullabyhaven
      June 10, 2007
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      Please

      No problem at all. Actually, I have just posted a very funny one, I think about Viagra, so if you like to laugh,
      try that one. lol

  • Cannonsfire silver member
    June 10, 2007

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    All who believeth in me will be saved, and Paul needed to know that for he had sinned but was redeemed. This is a pwerful write and done in a contemporary fashion that everyone could understand the message. Very enjoyable read. Love, C

    . Rewarded 4


    • 2lullabyhaven
      June 10, 2007
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      Thank you so much

      For stopping by and reviewing this piece. I thank you for your input. lol

  • aliceramone silver member
    June 9, 2007

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    yes that is a great event it also proves that no matter how far down the scale one has gone he can be redeemed with christ as Paul had murdered christians...a great blessing of a write and cleverly crafted


  • B Tha Revolution
    June 9, 2007

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    Amen!

    All the money and social status in the world, can't by you salvation from gods judgment. I really loved this poem, and the all to true message that i wish alot of people would heed. Stop trying to impress people and worry about impressing god.

    • 2lullabyhaven
      June 10, 2007
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      Wow

      Your review is so insightful. You hit the nail on the direct head. When the curtains close what will all those things really matter. Not too much. lol Thank you.

  • Emosie Vloei
    June 9, 2007

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    Amen

    As the Bible says we are all but filthy rags.To know God and accept his son is the washing away of that filth and bringing ourselves anew.I love this..yes lets all take a journey.

    . Rewarded 4


    • 2lullabyhaven
      June 10, 2007
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      Wow

      That's the spirit. I'm up for that fantastic journey. lol
      Thanks so much for this great review

  • poorpete greenslade gold member
    June 9, 2007

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    whoa.   pat you are so full of conviction when you get going..pull no punches and show where our values should lie . paul went on that journey and i guess we all should too , well doneSmile


    • 2lullabyhaven
      June 9, 2007
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      Peter

      It would be the ultimate thing to do, now wouldn't it, but,
      I can not answer that call for no one but myself. "Whom do you say that I am" is the direct and personal question He asks of each of us individually. Smile, and so are you up for a journey, Peter? That would be great, but, it's your call. lol TYlol

  • drybones
    June 9, 2007

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    Seven years ago, I left a six figure a year salary to answer God's call to ministry. The world would say I sacrificed a lot, but the trea