I feel your sorrow and your pain
As what you feel I feel
And everytime I hear the rain
I know your flesh is cut by steel
I know you have been hurt
I know the world is acting strange
And it hurts to see you hurt
It hurts to know there's nothing I can change
I can feel your pain
although you never speak about it
And your silence tells me
About what you're ready to commit
No one... nothing is immortal
So your pain will go away with time
If you fight it, it will die
Killing pain is not a crime
All I want you to know
Is that you have me by your side
Just accept my helping hand
And I'll help you live with dignity and pride
For a moment, think of me
How will I feel if who I love just leaves?
The pain I'll feel...
So stay with me, your friend, and never leave
Life is worth giving a try.
Author notes
Kevin? Are you alright?
Days ago we talked and you were so happy about finishing high school and all...
What is going on Kevin?
A contest entry
- Tell me, Reflect by LifeEndsNow.
375 points, ended June 9, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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dude i feel ur pain....it could use a better title....i mean u should call ur next poem nobody understands me....no offence but honestly...well good write anyway....best of luck xxsilentsuicidexx
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um...well it could use some rhime editing but i can see you tried. good luck with keeping your friend alive:-[) senserly emo 666
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This poem really shone a light for me, (even though it of course was not written with me in mind), a trully beautiful piece. It's funny to almost the ridiculous how peoples emotions can link so many miles and minds away, pain is nothing like regret, it can make you myall, it can make you sick, but to care for a friend is truly the heavens' gate key, thank you. My stand-out line was "Killing pain is not a crime" (Could have been the title!)
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This is really good. I love the thought you put into it... it's a very hopeful peice... and a sad peice... it made me think... (I sort of needed the boost myself...) nice work. congrats on your bronze trophy! keep up your amazing work!
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oh siss: this is so thoughtful and deep
so many emotions so many pains:S hope ur doing well hun
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Whoa I thought this was for me at first
Honey I thought you was talking to me and I thought you must of felt the pains I been in.. I lost my daughter on dec 26 and in Arip I lost my best freind and my Grandson and my daddy May 3 all three of them in two weeks time. I lost my grandson on a wednesday and on may 3 one week later my daddy died. I ended up in the hospital becuase it was just tooo much for my heart. But Iam glad you are there for who ever need you. IAm glad I heard from you finally. Love you honey
love
Mother
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Oh... I'm so sorry mom.
I didn't know all that but I'm glad that you felt close to that poem... and yes, all what was said in that poem is now addressed to you as well.
Life is always giving us tests and god watches us... will we pass or fail? Some fail... the stronger ones pass. So my mother, be strong and pass this test. There is always something that can turn you down... and there is always something that cheers you up.
As I like to say:
Soon the rain will be over and the sky will become clear, then the sun will reappear and you'll be happy again.
As after every night there is a day, after every sorrow there is joy.
So, don't loose hope and be strong. And why feel bad for those who passed away? Is it because we think they suffer? Why don't just think that the world they leave to is much much better than ours...
Hope you get better soon.
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Yes dear I am alright dont worry,
For the poem i liked it very well written as always
great job dear -kevin
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