How mesmorizing it is by the sea!
A grand display of symmetry, supreme.
A splash of the divine;
Blanketing life submerged.
A luminous glow, a glimmer of
hope for you and me.
Such sweet scintillation is the sea;
The sea in silenced blue hue.
Bathed in twilight,
by moonlit descent.
In all its wondrous splendor;
Its diaphanous glow.
Settling upon these
frigid waters
The sea has found me
in its frothy wake.
Have you ever noticed
how alluring it is by the sea?
Author notes
I served in the U.S. Navy for four years, and I developed such a love for the sea while spending many hours on lookout.
A contest entry
- Sea Breezes by daeste.
700 points, ended July 11, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your happy place. by samantha jean.
800 points, ended July 21, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I strived to give this a romantic rhythm. It was the first poem I wrote about the sea.
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This is very vivid with imagery this is a very lovely piece and I enjoyed reading it Pretty Good for your first sea poem Heck I forget what my first one is hehe
Cara
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Thank you, Cara!
It sure has been a while since I read this one. The four years I spent out to sea in the Navy definitely inspires all of my sea poetry. I spent most of the time in the Mediterranean, but also the Red Sea (during the Gulf War), the Aegean, and the North Atlantic. It sure was a fun four years. I miss the free travel. I got to visit more than 25 ports off the coast of the Mediterranean before I was even 22. When I was in the Washington Army National Guard, all I got to visit was the desert of Yakima in Washington State, and Fort Hunterligget in California. That was no comparison to Europe. It could be that it was the freezing temperatures in Yakima at 3 in the morning that I found less appealing than the Bahamas. I'm not really sure. HA HA HA! I'm done with school for three weeks, so I am in a really goofy mood.
Don
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A lovely liquid and lyrical tribute to your beloved sea, penned as only you can. Your love for all things 'aqua-marine' clearly shows in this wonderful poem. Keep up the wonderful works.
David Michaels
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Thank you so much, David.
Wow! I forgot all about this one. This was my very first sea poem, if I remember right. It sure feels good to read back over this one. I haven't read it since I first wrote it. Don
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Romantic ripples
Thats how i'd describe it, excellent craft lovely imagery, sorry for the late judgement, and thanks for the entry in the contest -
overflows with imagery and appreciation of the sea.
Each line bestows depths of beauty in a natural flow.
Blue
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Excellent
Your imagery was excellent. I can feel the wonder and respect you feel for the sea. Thank you for entering my contest. I see this is going to be a hard contest to judge.
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Yes I have. Not so luck to have been in the navy though, but staring at th stars while on g-duty now that was mesmerising if it didn't ge you killed.
Anyway, the opening lines of your poem are really striking in their flowing rhythm, but just like the sea, just when you get used to it, it changes.
If that was intentional thne well done.
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Thank you very much.
I was looking at the flow of this one, too. The third stanza seems a little off to me. I wish I had the time to take a poetry class, but I'm too swamped with working on my paralegal degree, and I don't have any electives left.
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wow..your poem has a lot dancing and magical words to describe the majestic beauty of the sea...and yes I noticed that the sea is so alluring especially if you were on a ship and just letting the waves splashing the ship and just inhaling the fresh sea air...oh the sea is such a happy place to be...
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Beautiful!
Loved this poem! My favorite verse is: "in all its wonderous splendor...its diaphanous glow".....lovely! A very enjoyable read! Carolyn
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a good poem, lots of movement with the water, the sea is life, it is where we all crept from, death to if we are not careful.
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a rather nice poem . penned by an old sea dog and enjoyed by many others . thanks for sharing .. peter
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Thanks, Peter.
I sure do feel like an old sea dog sometimes. I was only 18 when I joined the Navy, and I got out when I was 22. It's been fifteen years already since I left the Navy. Where did the time go already? I do love the sea. I will have to write about how the dolphins would dance in front of the bow of the ship while we were out to sea. If you have ever seen the movie TITANIC, there is a scene when the ship sets sail, and there are dolphins leaping in front of the ship. They love to do that for real. It is so much fun to watch. I'm going to jot that down, so I don't forget to write it. I'm working on a poem right now about lightning storms.
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