A bunch of the cows were mooing it up
in the cornfield, so they tell.
And, down in the meadow,
a big flock of sheep were raising a bit of hell.
There wasn't a way, on the godawful day,
of stopping that crop wrecking crew.
'Cause under a haystack, flopped out on his back,
lay that gold-bricking
Little Boy Blue.
The folks from the farm, they all cried with alarm,
on that sad but sunny morn.
Each one of them knew he could save all their crops,
if only he'd blow his horn.
But, none of them dared, or especially cared,
to waken him from his snooze.
'Cause Little Blue was as drunk as a skunk
on a bottle of two dollar booze.
©1999 jala
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This sounds like a mixed up fairy tale. There was a contest for mixed uip faity takles. Lrer[ up the gtreat writing.
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This was a wonderful piece and certainly my pleasure to read this early morning
~Tia
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Lovely
That was very sweet. Made me smile -
two dollar booze...
First of all can you tell me where he got the booze so cheap!!
Loved it... He was fresh from the creek and loaded for bear alright (wink!).
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This is too much
I tell you I am on the floor and I can't get up, my button is broke and the phone is dead. I have laughed till I hurt.
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Good poem, I liked the flow, it made me smile.
Have you ever the song 'Big Six' by Judge Dread, he was a reggae act from a few years ago. The song is a dirty account of the character of Little Boy Blue and this really reminded me of it. If you haven't heard it, I suggest you check it out.
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This gave me a good laugh.......the flow is very good. Thank you
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i like it
very cute, and fun to boot,
a poetic passion for sure.
a most interesting write,
ryhme and rythem flow pure...
rudolf
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This was very well written! Funny and cute... But also had meaning. Great rhyming skills too. Thanks for sharing it. :-)
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Snappy, funny and very well rhymed--I really enjoyed reading this subversive twist on Little Boy Blue!
Bill
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Hilarious
Really funny, great job.
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not quite the version for toddlers, eh? but cute and funny, and well within the original story. d
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Wonderful
The rhyme is perfect, choice of words couldn't be better and though written like a nonsense verse the poem tells story in a nutshell. Why don't you write ballads. You have the talent.
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I liked the sense of community created
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Really good. I wish I could write like that. All I ever write is dark and sad poetry. I tried to write something happy but didnt know how. I love reading things like this because it kind of reminds me of when I was little listening to stories by grandpa would tell. I miss those time but you have captured it in this poem and I thank you for that.
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