Into the mystic,over the sky
Past the clouds,away I fly
Mornings purple haze,evenings midnight blue
A twinkle of a star, a kiss of early dew~
Dancing in the fire, tugging on the sun
Swinging from a moonbeam, across the night I run~
Cradled by angels wings
baby's breath,the wind does sing
On a rainbow and beside a dream
Into the mystic,innocence gleams~
Unconscious love,naive lips's treasure
Be still my heart, inside forever
Into the mystic,over the sky
Past the clouds, away I fly~
Author notes
Picture was done by Moniki at www.deviant art.com
A contest entry
- Take Me On A Fantasy Contest by JeannieD Hunter.
1200 points, ended June 9, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~ Cherished Prewrites ~ by Sunkissed xo.
1000 points, ended November 15, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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What a sweet and tender write
I loved the fantasy and mytical feeling in this, it was utterly divine. The imagery is stunning, and every word has a special beauty to it. Well done on a fabulous write! Thanks so much for entering the contest
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a lovely write . . liked "a kiss of early dew" and "innocence gleams" . . good luck in the contest !!
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Very pretty poem and pic', Sis!
Best of Luck in this contest!
Love you!
<3 Maureen
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Your beautiful words have really given the picture a life all its own. I also just love the enchanting background. The whole piece is an enjoyable read, thanks for sharing with me Susan.
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I long to take this journey that you've described so beautifully here. This wants to make me reach up to the sky and capture a star. Gorgeous poem, lovely background, and the picture as well.
Love to you,
~Amanda~
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Beautiful!!
I particularly liked these lines:
Cradled by angels wings
baby's breath,the wind she sings
On a rainbow and beside a dream
Into the mystic,innocence gleams~
A great write!
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Very well done. I loved the journey depicted here and also the background. congrats on the HM
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A beautiful poem.......... striking!
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Wonderful
Oh my this was great. So very expressed. Love the background. Best of luck in the contest. -
a very beautiful poem your imagery is purly magical the flow is terrific I love the border and the image good luck int he contest I realy enjoyed your delightful poem thank you for sharingmaralis
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I read and
commented before but still as gorgeous...
Linda
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Best of Luck in this contest, Sis! Your beautiful poem deserves GOLD!
Love You!
♥ Maureen
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Beauty, soft and sweet. Lovely flow which is so inviting to the reader. Great imagery.
Nicely done.
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Beautiful!!
I'm on this flight with you Susan!! I love this poem!!! You just took me for a wonderfully discriptive journey! Fantastic job on this one my dear!! Don
Guess I already read this one but it was even better than the first time!! Congrats on the gold! Don
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Lovely Fantasy!
I would like to see a Gold trophy on your mantel for this gem! Very nicely done, sis.
Best of Luck in this contest!
Love You!
♥ Maureen
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Wonderful
Oh my sis, such an incredible poem. So full of such powerful images and feelings. Best of luck in the contest. -
Beautiful flow to this piece. Perfect picture and background with it. I smell gold brewing here!
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Absolutly Stunning
Great Job sweetie this is fabulous. I love the flow the pic everything congrats on the HM. I believe that contest holder had there work cut out for them because this deserves a gold.
Delila
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This is a lovely quatrain with an enchanting image. The flow is liquid with the aabb rhyme structura and the rhyming couplets. Well done!
Love,
Amera ♥
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Congrats on the HM!! A very delightful write full of imagery and emotion that captures your readers attention and keeps it. A journey with you to your favorite places being most fun ever. Great jon Susan!! Don
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Flying away...
Dancing on stars and taking this wonderful poem to Poetry Planet where it will bring smiles and sighs from many visitors!
Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful words! 
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enjoyable
Enjoyable piece. Good imagery and vocabulary as always. My only critique is the repetitive use of 'mystic' took away a bit from the flow for me. However, I see it tying the last two stanza together as well. Just a preference 'call.' -
A beauty!
How ever do you do this? You must have some wonderful resources and of course your beautiful talent that shines out best of all!
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Excellent!
Susan, this is what poetry is about! I love your word choices and the rhyme. The flow of this piece is superb I love the dreamy quality it has and how the first two lines also end the poem. That just rounds it out so nicely!
Your pieces are works of art to me and I really appreciate the thought you put into each and every one of them.
~Peace to you
John
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Enchanting!
Congratulations on receiving honorable mention for this lovely poem! Loved the imagery and enjoyed the fantasy! Great trip..I'm bookmarking this so I can take the trip again when I want to escape and celebrate!
Love you, sis!
♥ Maureen
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Wonderful! Very beautiful imagery and flow. So soft and comforting. Beautiful presentation as well. Great job. Thanks for this entry and good luck.
Jeannie
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This poem explains where you get your great strength from, the universe is your real home of treasures and wonders and you can fly through it whenever you choose. A lovely uplifting poem that reminds me of how I too cope with life's difficult trials.
Love, light & peace
Georgia
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Right away I loved this
This was a creation of perfect bliss (I rhyme!)
But not as good as you pull it off!
Cradeled by angels wings
baby's breath,the wind she sings
Your description used all thigs pure and elegant, I could feel m yself being taken away by it
It was in a whole new world
It was a good thing for it to be short, then our own imaginations can take us further
This was so beautiful
My favorite I've read from you
I think I'll bookmark it and come back on it, when I need to be in another world
Hope you are feelinjg OK
~Lauren
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beautiful
You create a peaceful and beautiful place with your words in this poem. The rhyme is excellent, and the flow is very smooth. I especially like these lines:
"Into the mystic,over the sky
Past the clouds,away I fly"
Best wishes in the contest!
Aurora 2012
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Fly away is so mystical
great poem ofangelic thoughts, beautiful imiginations here ty for sharing...mm -
Beautiful
Oh my I felt myself flying away with this one. It is so breathtaking. A wonderful creation. Good luck in the contest.
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