Just a cry from the dark, no need to be alarmed
Tape shut your eyes and just carry on
There's no need to worry and no need to explore
No one lives in this corner anymore
So bolt shut your mouths, don't say a thing
Don't ask any questions, there's no truth to sing
There's no need to cry and reality, you can just ignore
No one lives in this corner anymore
Now, cover your ears, listen to the angels pray
While you hide your head, the evil ones we slay
There's no need to panic and no need for fear evermore
No one lives in this corner anymore
Just a dark corner and a cry for help
No one tried to help her escape from her personal hell
But now since she's gone and took her live, there's no need to dwell
No one lives in this corner anymore
No one will live in this corner forevermore
Author notes
Option #3
A contest entry
- options, options, options by hungermuncher.
400 points, ended June 22, 2007, 9 entries
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"There's no need to cry and reality, you can just ignore" - "reality" I believe you mean "really", and there should be no comma after that word since it reads as one continuous line.
"There's no need to panic and no need for fear evermore" - you have an extra space between "need" and "for".
"But now since she's gone and took her live, there's no need to dwell" - "live" would be "life".
A nice poem that you have written here.
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very intense, but can relate to someone i know. nice write. thanks for joining our group, Alone in my mind. hope you will enjoy your stay.
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Now, cover your ears, listen to the angels pray
While you hide your head, the evil ones we slay
There's no need to panic and no need for fear evermore
No one lives in this corner anymore
I loved those lines, I think they were the strongest part of the poem. Though I don't like "tape your eyes shut" or "bolt shut your mouths," they sound a bit awkward. Over all, very nice peom.
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i really like it Em even though it's for a contest it's amazing and runs smothly and dramaticly. nice write!
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laurel
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this was really good.. you had a lot to say and you said it well.,.. im mostly going to put a big comment(just telling you honestly) so i can build up my points and so i can stay a little longer possibly and try to put on a contest.. so yeah.. -
i like it well done but u didnt put the option number in the authors notes like i said which shows u read the rules so can u put it in please best of luck j
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