travelling to stars
protons neutrons electrons
awareness of him
her sheer atomic
moment: moving molecules
exult into moles
expanded memory of ecstasy
his eyes search for her but she
is already within him:
a chemical reaction -
he loves her passionately
she is drifting
from his heart - a hydra of lava
to heavenly places
how hypostatic she has become
the kiss he is withholding
whispered words
waiting for his utterance
tender raptures
her name smouldering
in his mouth - burning his lips
syllabic yearning
myra
07.08.2003
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Written August 7th, 2003
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Ahhh the chemistry of love. You have mixed a sensual, magical love potion with your words. Every verse is an essential element in this wonderfully complex compound. The photo is nice too.
Truly yours,
Leo Long -
Gorgeous poem (and picture, too). It's nice how the universe abounds with beauty.
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Wiskunde...nie my sterk punt nie maar...
Soul mate ( gedeel deur ) chemistry + passion + liefde =
twee mense wat ALLES het Myra...
Thought this was an exceptional write...
Specifically loved this stanza :
" expanded memory of ecstasy
his eyes search for her but she
is already within him ":...
Tender , sensual , teasing almost...
Enjoyed thoroughly
~ sonia ~ X
Ps . Dankie weereens vir Jou kommentaar op my eie...ek
waardeur dit baie dat Jy tyd opgee om te lees...
Edited on Aug 19, 5:24 p.m. because ''. -
Passionate Chemistry, is it an animal instinct or more a neurological imperative. Eyes and sighs collide better than an atom bomb.
Jules. -
chemistery and love, turns me on..:-)) great Myra..I really loved it and very SMART poem...I loved the sexual filled words...keep up...
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chemistry is fine with me
Well firstly,
Myra I want you know that I really loved the mixture of chemistry and passion here.
I think that the protons and neutrons were not the ones making you realize that he was near you but it was the electronic clouds
that surrounds ‘em, which help ‘em with everything (I guess…I already forgot the chapter by now…oh gosh how’ll I pass my GCE)… ‘Neways lols!
So did ‘neone of u weighed the atomic mass?
The relative molecular mass…then how much of moles in grams then? …
Hey I should say the combination of chemical reaction with the “oh” feeling at times is well carried.
Though I m not experienced at all, I guess this is how one feels… loves and hugs :x …
Hey gtg… I never c u on-line (hey that’s ironic…i often see u but for just a while)
‘Neways bye for now and I loved it as much as I love u!!!!
With love ille*
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My God you are pretty! There is something magical about you, your words, the patterns of your mind... You have me under your spell
Take care, precious muse
Rage -
excellent
Quite unique and interesting. I also love the last stanza. It adds even more impact. Amazing concept and well-penned piece. Beautiful as usual, Myra
~Kathy -
Only if you eat junk food, Donnz, only if you eat junk food
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Today I read on the MSN web that a photograph from the Hubble Telescope shows one galaxy eating and devouring another smaller galaxy... It appears that food is the largest need in the universe, unfortunately 'love is also an unsatisfied appetite.lol
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Thank you Stompsalot, Odyssey and Emma, for reading and commenting. This poem is very personal and very private, yet I dare to share it with the world, because I believe love to be a chemical process at the basis of all Life ... and at the very basis of LOVE itself: spiritually, that is. Energy of Light.
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Being a friend of Nukerliu, and it was he who recommended me this poem, I must say that I agree with him.
I usually don't in terms of intrepretations, but yes, this poem is beautifully penned... it deserves to be in literature books.
Once again my favorite stanza is:
"her name smouldering
in his mouth - burning his lips
syllabic yearning " -- the implication of "i love you" without really saying it. That is what makes this poem good to great to amazing.
Thank you for sharing it.
--EMMA -
ohhhhh ... um.. just wooooooooooooonderful.
You need no "critique" here, your work required only one thing.
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A perfect write. So sensual, captivating, and enticing.
Very magnetic appeal to this write. I absolutely adored this. I am bookmarking it. So I can come back and enjoy the read again and again.
It is just one of those not too much, not too little.. Just the right amount of spice. Thoroughly enjoyed.
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Thanks, my Poet friends, for these comments ...
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These images just set my imagination on fire, Myra! What a wonderful, somewhat whimsical, and yet, very passionate write!
Eternal return
warm summer wind,
storm brewing,
under my skin.
One life?
No means of comparison...
Thunderous thoughts
mystery and abandon
one in a million
magnetic attraction
heat lightning
animal passion
Soar
into the Unknown...
centrifugal force
sinuous motion.
Cut loose the
sandbags
betray gravity
Where does helium go?
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magical,chemical,exolosive poem
Amazing Myra-- mixing chemistry of sceince with the chemistry of love. You're so very gifted! I enjoyed reading your book while Sherry was here in ND. She made it home this a.m. I wasn't on PC much while Sherry was here. I wanted to enjoy and cherish each moment with her. Our home is pretty quiet now. She does bring Sunbeams indoors with her. Foxie the already spoiled terrier is pouting because Sherry has left here. She ate up all that extra attention and love.Now we have to bribe the 10 1/2 yr. Queen of the ranchero to do as we want. Kinda funny! Told Sunbeam this would happen!!! I'll catch up on my reading promise! This piece was a terrific place to start with you! God Bless,
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WHOLY POTATOES!
First of all Myra, I must say that I thoughrouly enjoyed your poetry! Thus, let me do a comprehensive critique:
travelling to stars
protons neutrons electrons
awareness of him --> first of all, you esteablish a heavenly setting, an elevated love, (perhaps even self flattering) and you set the tone quite elegantly. furthermore, we see here that though the scope is huge, "traveling the stars", we also see that the love also pays attention to details as seen int he "protons neutrons, elections". the only thing that bothers me is "awareness of him".. should it be "aware of him"?
her sheer atomic
moment: moving molecules
exult into moles --> here again, the details transform into something more significant -- elegantly suggesting that love, the small things in life and love (to put it in a cliched manner) combines to make soemthing bigger, more wonderufl, the whole love and in this case "exult into moles"
expanded memory of ecstasy
his eyes search for her but she
is already within him:
a chemical reaction
he loves her passionately -- this ties everything into something that we all recongize
she is drifting
from his heart - a hydra of lava
to heavenly places -- im confused in this part slightly.. should it be "drifting WITH his heart"... just wondering. hydra of lava, interesting imagery, a hydra is a fire creature.. with lava that trascents into heavenly places. beautiful but somewhat haunting at the same time.
how hypostatic she has become
the kiss he is withholding --> oooOOOo HYPOSTATIC is the perfect scentific word for this. wonderufl wonderful!
whispered words
waiting for his utterance
tender raptures
her name smouldering
in his mouth - burning his lips
syllabic yearning --> wow, wow -- the wait, the want, the desire all encapsulated into a yearning for his utterance. his utterance of "I love you" though implied, and though one must dig deep to see this. WOW.
amazing myra, simply, amazing.
~ lewis
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uhh all the science terms sorta confozozed me but i think i sorta get the love thingy -- it says its about love and i think its like the molecules like each other and something?
and i think it really flows and stuff...
really nice poem, though i dun think i undesrstand most of ittt.
----------brookk -
Myra
I love this write, sexual chemistry filled words, remins me of that song, she blinded me with science , I think that's the name of it 
My favorite:
whispered words
waiting for his utterance
tender raptures
her name smouldering
in his mouth - burning his lips
syllabic yearning
Karen
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On Myra
her sheer atomic
moment
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Great
Interesting poem. I liked the way in which you used love as a way with science - if that's how you put it. I think you know what I mean anyways. I liked the flow of this poem.
I would just suggest using capitals at the beginning of your lines. This would just look better. That is all I'm suggesting, but if that's what you like then leave it.
Keep it up, you have something here.
Smiles always,
Kristina
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