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Get this right

its hope of one last chance,
that leads me throught the winter,
and brings me back to here,
to melt in this sight of you,
just want to wrap my arms around you girl,
just want to wrap my arms around you

and we've still got time to know,
so please dont ask me why,
these tears are streaming down my face,
your glow still gets me everytime,
just want to wrap my arms around you,
but your better off without you anyway, goodbye,

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  • Dovina
    June 22, 2007

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    Aww, this poem ihe is saying goodbye, and a little happy because at the beginning it feels like there is a little hope. good write lil bro! I agree with the masked one, that this actually could be a song. GO for it! love ya lots!
    -missjilleen


  • the masked one
    June 19, 2007

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    wow i really like this one... its beautiful and emotional...and very lyrical. Could probably make this into a song... very good


  • calambres91
    June 19, 2007
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    this is cold, but if you feel it is ok asa poem is cool


  • Harrisham Minhas
    June 10, 2007

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    An emotional write. Nicely done.

    Thanks for your entry. Good luck in my contest.

    Harrisham Minhas


  • chaostheory89
    June 9, 2007
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    thank you for the entry good luck

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