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Communion

 

 

                                                                                                     

 The heather was the color of strangled indigo in the pre-dawn light.

 I traveled in winged serenity as I approached the sacred grove.

 My sisters gathered under the sheltering oaks to celebrate our sunrise rites.

 I joined with them, sky-clad, a whirling mass of dancing whims and limbs.

 The sanctimonious inquisitors hungered to scent our flesh in their fire.

 I closed my eyes and saw them slouching behind brutish faces,

 in the cavernous church, where they knelt in communion

 with their wrathful god, taking the body of Christ, swallowed in empty vows .  

                                                                                                              

 Their frosted intentions heavy with the weight of sour deceit,

 convincing themselves their bloodthirsty plans were holy and righteous. 

 I called the Watchtowers and cast The Circle, in fellowship with my sisters.

 We beseeched the Goddess to attend us, as we cast their intentions back upon them.

 "As ye would sow, so shall ye reap, to the power of three, so mote it be"

 The chant began in barely audible whispers as we danced the circle,

 our eyes locked on the fire at its center, as the chant's volume increased.

 We shared a vision of the dim interior of the church, where our would-be tormentors knelt.

                                                                                                                                       

 As we drew their planned violence against us from their minds and hearts,

 they became aware of an unnatural wind, within solid oaken walls.

 Terror blanched their skin as the candles overturned and leapt into a merry conflagration.

 The wood of the floor, pews, and very altar burst preternaturally into the inferno of their intent.

 Shrill screams accompanied their frenzied attempts at escape, but the way was blocked.

 Their features melted into hideous caricatures of the demons we were accused of dallying with.

 Thirteen serene faces, petals of innocence on a flower of justice, glowed in the light of the fire.

 "As ye would sow, so shall ye reap, to the power of three, so mote it be" 

 "As ye would sow, so shall ye reap, to the power of three, so mote it be"

"As ye would sow, so shall ye reap, to the power of three, so mote it be"

                                                                                                                      

Author notes

Options 1 (a story in three stanzas),2(a dark write) and 5(phrase bank) combined.

phrases used:

strangled indigo
winged serenity
dancing whims and limbs
swallowed in empty vows
frosted intentions
the weight of sour deceit
petals of innocence


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Due to a couple of concerned comments, I'm adding a note for any who are uncomfortable and percieve an anti-Christian message here. Notice that Christ is capitalized. This is not intended to be anti-Christian. This is meant to condemn atrocities done in His Name. Like the holy inquisitions in which 10's of thousands were slaughtered "in God's name" Which obviously couldn't be farther from His will. Notice that the "incantation" is actually scripture...as you sow so shall you reap (also the basis of the Wiccan Law of Threefold Return: “That which one sends into the world returns to the sender threefold”. It is seen as a law of nature and represents responsibility to a Wiccan. )
And also those evil doers taking communion in the poem "swallowed with empty vows" In other words, without the presence of the Holy Spirit.

I'm certain that there are no Christians in our era who would countenance the burning at the stake of thousands of people accused of witchcraft, most of which were simply falacious and ridiculous accusations for reasons such as the practice of herbal healing, or midwifery. For carrying good luck charms. For celebrating holidays with ageless cultural traditions like yulelogs and mistletoe. Because of involuntary physical attributes such as moles upon the body which were considered proof of witchcraft, declared "extra teats" used to suckle their familiars. Accused witches were "tested" by being immersed in deep water. If they sank, they were innocent (though innocence was often accompanyed by drowning) If they floated they were guilty. In my opinion, there is no behavior that could stray farther from the path of The One. What is threatening about women dancing around a fire, and chanting a truth found in scripture? Beseeching "The Goddess" ? That's just semantics. Pagan practices are remnants of earlier beliefs, from the dawn of man, when The Earth's bounty was the center of their survival and hence their spirituality. Forgive me if you disagree, but I've read the bible multiple times, and what I see as the path of The One, is not Church Dogma, but Christ's Words. Those were of tolerance, kindness, generousity, passivity, and unconditional love and forgiveness, none of which is what was practiced during the "holy" inquisitons. Sorry for hopping on the soapbox, but I wanted to clarify the message of this piece. I'm including a link to an excellent web page that lists various estimates as to the actual number of people executed during the burning times.
http://www.holocaust-history.org/~rjg/witches.shtml

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  • Jonathan ROBIN
    June 15, 2008
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    Discomfort with Discomfort

    No need to apologise to pretentiousness or bigotry, Diana, when the hurly-burly's done, when the battle's lost or won how many would stand up and be counted ... let the walking wounded bury the walking wounded and continue your soaring flight ignoring their sore spots


  • MuddyKing
    July 10, 2007
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    excellent


  • DancingRed
    June 19, 2007
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    You tell a most powerful story, using the phrases in a beautifully unique way.
    My only (slightly negative) comment is that I found this piece a little "heavy" - the lines were packed with almost too much descriptive language. Maybe shorter lines could have helped there too. Even so, it is written very well.
    Thanks for entering.
    DancingRed.

  • LadyMidnight07
    June 12, 2007
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    i personaly thought this was an amazing write,and although i am not a christian i dont see what would be so upsetting to one.you stated your point very carefully,and the imagery of your words is beautiful.
    a unique way of writing about the simularities between the pagan way and christianity.
    excellent job!
    ~midnight~


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 11, 2007
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    Personally, I am a Christian - and really enjoyed this piece. There was no disrespect seen on my part
    The language was on key, well worded. This could be a story. Nice use of the phrase bank as well. Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!


  • Naridill
    June 9, 2007

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    Wow! Nicely done!
    I think thats all I can possibly think of at moment.
    Thanks alot for entry.
    (Oh and love first line mainly cause it has my name, lol)


    • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
      June 9, 2007
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      Thanks, Heather I presume? So glad you liked it! It felt like I was compelled to tell this tale, I was amazed at how easily it flowed out, and what a trip to find seven phrases in the phrase bank that fit so seamlessly into place like they were specific to this piece! I'm having a blast! Thanks again!
      xxoo


      • Naridill
        June 9, 2007
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        This was actually the best version of any of the word bank entries. Some just sounded too familiar, but this was good.
        Thanks again


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    June 9, 2007

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    This is an awesome write bursting with the truth. I support you and agree with the Threefold law of Karma. It is said what the church did in the name of Christ. No religion teaches hatred, bloodshed, burning innocent women, theft and such negative things. It is sad what happened then. May God forgive the sinners. Very powerful background here and awesome music..am enjoying it as I write here..

    All the best in the contest,
    Charishma


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    June 9, 2007

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    This was one of the worst holocausts and genocides in history, yet it is little spoken of. I have a great aunt that was condemned as a witch during the Salem Witch Trials. I have studied this phenomenon and have come to the conclusion that it was used as a political and religious excuse to get rid of people for greedy, immoral reasons, such as a spouse, to gain property, and the list is endless. It is so little understood, and most people don't understand the Wiccan religion at all.

    Your poem can come across as vindictive, but it is true what the great Avatar Jesus said about what one sows, one shall reap! Your author's note was reassuring that you are not advocating that these atrocities be done in return. Yet, it is true, the Law of Karma will, and is, taking care of that. The Church corrupted and oppressed in His name. That's why I believe in separation of Church and State, because power corrupts! It wasn't the religion but the people in power who corrupted it and misused it for their own misguided gains.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 8, 2007
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    Diana,

    yes, I am aware that the memories of the flames licking at you, still exist, but my God gal, this was a really MARVELOUS WRITE! Loved it! One of your best in a lomg time. And I could say much on this but I shall leave it until later.



    Len


  • daeste
    June 8, 2007

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    Excellent!

    Masterful, the scene portrayed wisked me back into time and made me feel as if I was there. I was born on Halloween and at one time I went through a stage where I read anything and everything I could get my hands on about the origins of the holiday. This fits right in with thatand the Druids. Well done. If you have a chance take a look at a poem of mine titled "Summers End"


  • ScarletO gold member
    June 8, 2007

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    I was relieved to read the author comment for it made the poem feel better to read. I feel your poetic ability shines brightly in its display and meaning. I too do not feel anyone has the right to take another life through God's name. Vengence is Mine, I believe is the verse, not man's. A very intersting poem that feels mysitcal and flowing. Love the colorful background.


  • duana
    June 8, 2007
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    very powerful background, and poetry.


  • Amera gold member
    June 8, 2007

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    Bravo!

    Wonderful! Bravo!! What a great story; dark and emotional keeping me on the edge of my seat throughout the entire piece. The power of the feminine shines in the over powering of the hypocritical and judgmental church. Vengeance and vendetta told in a classic fluid manor. I shall feature this poem; “As ye would sow, so shall ye reap, to the power of three, so mote it be".

    Love,
    Amera ♥

  • mcheadle
    June 8, 2007
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    For fun - it was wild

    For real it was wild to wild to be my thing the picture was inticing, only for a while. like I said not my thing..I do the one -- you know the man on the cross, and this makes me cry. but you see he died for me so I will stick with Him, sorry I got to go I 'm sure He is calling "get you out of there"


  • intanglio2ring
    June 8, 2007

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    Not at all what I expected!

    Always a wonderful work of art - but I'm taken aback by the voilence of the scene. It breaks my heart to think that violence is held towards anyone who comes to Christ - And communion comes with it's own warning in the Bible. I do agree that as ye sow, so shall ye reap.
    And of course your verse blow away all competition - you're a talented poetess!
    Glad I stopped by & thanks for the extra points!
    Tang

    Wishing you the best in the contest!


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    June 8, 2007
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    This is a powerful tale of supernatural retribution. It is so alive with imagery and emotion and draws the reader to its' worthy conclusion. The colorful background images and the picture adds an extra dimension of expression to the overall package. This was exceptional.

    Dennis :^)


  • Cannonsfire
    June 8, 2007

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    Wow this is an awesome narrative where the reader is put into this scene with vivid imagery. I must admit to thinking of the 'charmed ones' as reference to the power of three within this lol too much damn TV I guess. Wonderfully written my friend. Love, C

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