Just watch me spiral into your ocean blue eyes with waves the size of your lies
as i drown in poisoned words
Ill bite my glitter painted nails as i spit out the taste of sour kisses.
you exposed my cracked heart[but it isnt so hard to break something so delicate]
made of glass and fixed with glue
I fell into my rainbow wonderland, singing songs of my broken past [of things i dont even remember]
But ill whisper mt half hearted confession of you hurting me in a way that felt so good.
&of how i tripped myself to fall in love with the way you said my name or how you kissed my forhead so i wouldnt leave
I hated how your world was grey while i was stuck in black and white.
Oh, and how you could use that as your excuse [no wrong or right]
you caused the plauge [you said breaking hearts was so in style]
"dont ever forgive him"
but somewhere between you touching me and telling me those four letter lies i started to think of you at night [i tried not to]
but being alone isnt as easy as people make it seem
I had to stop sleeping next to perfect strangers just to keep me alive
I think what i did would have been half as bad if i just could have gotten over you
but how could i forget you and how you made me seem so small
[i felt safe all wraped up tight]
you let me lay next to you for a little while
i cherished theese 3 minute moments of you catching your breath
Sometimes when i felt brave id put my hand on your cheast and feel your heartbeat
so this is what you loved me with [all your might??]
Author notes
HELL IN HARMONY:
My first poem I entered, I wrote for this contest.
I more so wanted your opinion on this one.
I think its more cliché. .
A contest entry
- The beauty of pain. by Jai Guru Deva.
700 points, ended August 6, 2007, 81 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Is Dirty Pretty a Lost Cause? by Hell In Harmony.
6500 points, ended July 22, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"but how could i forget you and how you made me seem so small
[i felt safe all wrapped up tight]
you let me lay next to you for a little while
i cherished theese 3 minute moments of you catching your breath" <-- aww. adorable.
This was super cute! Maybe a little cliche. but still good. I liked it a lot.
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cliche.?
id like to see her do better.. lol. :]]
this is freaking incredible.
much love,
oldschool
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Kind of cliche, sorry.
Not bad form though -
This is my favorite so far. I love it so much.
You are an amazing writer and it is blatently evident with this poem.
Good job and good luck. -
I really like this a lot. I love the descriptions and the emotion in it. This is really sad and I can feel the pain. There are a few spelling errors mt(my), blach(black) etc. and some places seem to be missing a word like "of how tripped myself" (of how I tripped myself, maybe?), but other than that great job. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for entering.
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