The angel fallen from the sky the pain it must have endured,
the sadness and longing it has for its long awaiting home
its friends and family missed dearly
the tears she cry's through the night and no one shall hear her cry's
through the silence no one hears and no one notices the poor
fallen angel just crying there
Author notes
age 13
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and Under ONLY ~ Pick an Image and write what comes to mind by Amunet Wolfbane.
300 points, ended June 26, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Me!
These is scarily ironic and parallel to my poem with the exact same name. *suspicious* Did you read that poem? I love it because it's so similar to me and my situation in some ways. Love the familiarity of this sadness.
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Really great job of this one. I really like it heaps
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A lot of sadness in this short poem here... There's only one suggestion I'd make and that is to try and split up the lines a bit
e.g.
the angel fallen
from the sky,
the pain it must've endured
thank you for entering this contest
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she look so sad and cold
and your poem said just that.
lonely missing her family dear.
wow.
good luck
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Nice job!
a fallen angel is allways a great topic!
I HOPE YOU WINNN
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