Oh! What fun it is to be a child,
to run around and to just be wild,
on happy days, in sunshine mild,
just to be innocent deep inside.
Always in this cheerful mood, I play
in the merry moments of each day
and in cheery things I often say,
just to be jolly, not have to hide.
Author notes
This form is an Ochtfochlach and the rhyme scheme is aaabcccb. You don't have to count syllables but I've done 9 syllables in each line.
I am 12 years old
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and Under Only ~ Pick a Title and Roll With it 2 by Amunet Wolfbane.
450 points, ended June 14, 2007, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love the brightness of this poem. It made me think about the wonder and fun it was to be a child. They are days you shouldnt take for granted they will be gone before you know it.
I usually dont like rhyme. I dont think that most people can really pull it off, but you show that you have a talent that surpasses your page.
Nicely done.
Criss -
good i liked this its simple and a joy to read well done and I think one day you will be just as good as your mum
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GREAT!!!
Very good Jordan!! You write this with spirit and everything. My motto: 'be a kid and haaaaaaaaaave FUN!' Have fun, my friend. Live your life to the fullest. Be proud of who you are and persevere with bold confidence. Best wishes with your writing. God bless.
Brian
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I think you're an excellent poet, especially for your age! Trying out new forms is a great way to explore new parts of poetry, and you did a really good job with this one.
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A well written piece kept true to form. You kept each line in perfect sync throughout. The flow and rhyme are done well and the piece over all is wonderful!
Blessings
celticmoon
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wow
it's a FORM! nice~
i KNEW something was up, and then you said what kind of form it was and tada~ i'm gonna have to try it sometime.
are you sure you're 12??
SO much talent... being 12 myself it's a "looking up to you" type of "so much talent..." *GIGGLE*!
nice~
good luck
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This is one of the first forms you ever tried and I see you haven't lost your touch This reflects the title very well and stays true to form throughout the piece. It's light and joyful and I really like it alot. you've done well too to stick to a syllable count, I'm proud of you! Love you always. Mum
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