When last I left my heart enthralled by you
I knew my care had not been placed in vain
that we would surely rise to meet again
to fill our hearts with love that only two
could solely bring heart bliss in all we do,
and of it all we two would then sustain.
Yet I to you do sing of this refrain
in afterglow as we bid fond adieu.
Remember me where peaceful waters flow
in trickling rivers as they calm cascade
to hear our plea where love sings in our core
my heart to yours in oneness I bestow
so never shall yours ever feel betrayed
and always will it love forevermore.
Copyright © 2007
Pamela A. Lamppa
(All Rights Reserved)
Author notes
Petrarchan Sonnet - rhyme scheme abbaabba cdecde
In a list
A contest entry
- BATTLE OF SONNETS ROUND 2 by mamad.
550 points, ended June 19, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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beautiful sonnet.........
I love the romantic rhythm to this. It sounds so perfect when read aloud.
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knight70
Thank you so much. I think the only way to read a sonnet is aloud. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Very nice ...
but I'd change "trickle" to "trickling". Otherwise, it's about perfect in my opinion.
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ecrivain01
I do think you have something there. Thank you. How have you been? Hope all is well. GREAT to hear from you. Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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lovely sonnet filled with passion...great language and romance with a fantastic flow that soothes love...excellent
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aliceramone
Thank you so much for your kind words. I was first introduced to the Italian Sonnet by a fellow AP Writer Eusebius. He has a knack for them where I truly do struggle. I was pleased with the end result for this one and am truly pleased for your comment here. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Beautiful sonnet Pamela, shows a lot of heartfelt emotion and caring. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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ckwriter69
Thank you so much. I am so pleased you enjoyed this Italian Sonnet. ~Pamela
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Old world essence permeates these romantic lines with such a sense of sadness in the plea to remember. I recall saying goodbye when I was 16 with similar feelings settling like mist over me. Echoes....
Sometimes, forever.
I am wistful about such lovely sonnets as this...rue my inability to conform to the pattern and maintain the music. Beautifully done!
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klassy lassy
Thank you so much for such kind words. I am so sorry a goodbye as this has ever touched your life. Thank you again for such wonderful words, Echoes....Sometimes, forever - tis true. 
Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Oooooooooooooohhhhhhhh!!!!!
Pam, This is a lovely Italian Sonnet that you penned for the Battle Of Sonnets. Forevermore will these words be imprinted along with the imagery that floated through my mind's eye. SIGHING You left me breathless as usual and this time you almost left me speechless.
I did say almost. LOL 
Your rhythm and rhyme are perfect and the elegant verbiage flowed from the page straight to my heart. When two hearts become one they find that forevermore you just shared with us. Best wishes in the contest, this sounds golden. Love you my friend, Joyce 
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Joyce
I am so pleased you enjoyed this piece. There are many layers of depth in this sonnet and I am thrilled you enjoyed it. This one truly did come from my heart. ~Pamela
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A truly beautiful Italian Sonnet that was penned to perfection and was a real treat to read and savor. Best of luck in the contest.
David Michaels
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David
Thank you so much for your kind words on this piece. I appreciate them so much. ~Pamela
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pam this is so beautifully written. I loved th elanguage and the imagery. this flowed so well and had a lovely serene feel to it. brilliant. All the best in the contest!
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That is a wonderful way to say goodbye to someone
well written and thought out this is a wondeful peice of work.
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Wonderful! This is a perfect Petrarchan and you see very few of them on AP. Rhyme meter and structure is all perfect and you even placed the volta in the correct spot. I love the image… GREAT job!
Love,
Amera ♥
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gorgeous. you did wonderful job on this one, it flows and rhymes perfectly. GREAT JOB!
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soft and wonderful
ohhhhhhhh this was a delight
from start to finish so very very touching,
leaves a heart to ponder,
very very soft and wonderful.
Blessings
Frozentearz
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Wonderful! Once I wipe my tears away, I will be able to make a better comment... this is beautiful.
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Excellent!
I give you credit for this one, excellent job! I have attempted the sonnet a couple of times and always fail miserably, so I know how difficult they can be, you made this look so easy, just a wonderful job!
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The title is perfect for this lovely sonnet. Very well written and full of love.
Lady Dragonwyck
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Oh my! How this moved me to tears and left such a bittersweet song playing in my mind of such a sad goodbye~
So beautifully composed with your special elegance with form poetry. Oh, how I DO love reading your sonnets
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