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[ when i see you ]

when i see you

i see a man

a broken man

a man stuck in a habit, that has takin over his life

i see a man that really wants to be there for me, but right now thinks that its too late

but its not, and it never will be

my heart is always open

i love you and i know you love me

but right now your just not in a place to say it

so before its too late i just want you to know i except you appology

even though you havent said it yet

i kno it will come eventually

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  • menmusic
    June 15, 2007
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    i like this poem i think that its really good and i like the way you expressed your towards it...

  • thelordreigns gold member
    June 12, 2007
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    This is strength of character - to be able to forgive before an apology is even uttered.

    Great write. Great heart in this piece.

    Here are some edits - line 4 "taken" - line 5/6 - "it's" - line 9 - "you're"- line 10 - "accept" and "your" - line 12 "know".

    Hugs - joanne


  • Birgitte gold member
    June 8, 2007

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    a few spelling errors, but other than that, great write. forgiving is really a great quality to posses. to always keep ones heart open. very nice!