brave bird, beautiful lake
on which mallards and lillipads float,
luring visitors, with gifts of brown bread, soft to touch;
dost shine a good deed everyday.
splish, splash, splosh and splutter
up and down bobs a knowing head.
put their by god, as peace, for pitiful man.
evil having no place in this, this glorious, majestic swim.
remember the serenity for eternity
damp like a secret war-time hero.
usual occurence to the naked eye.
crested grebes are a platoon of wayward sailors,
kings of the lake you'll observe
with ripples that govern with patient strength,
old birds nestle from the whooping wind.
watch and smell the rain gently lift the morning dew.
A contest entry
- PICTURE INSPIRED ~ *Poetry Formed VIII* by Arkbear.
300 points, ended July 2, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is such a beautiful calming poem, its like all of lifes problems just float away when you feed the ducks lol my favorite line was
on which mallards and lillipads float
Lovely imagery, very well written
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Your imagery sent my imagination
to the sweet springs of summer
Very vivid , great use of language
Magical and Enchating
~Pastel
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SO LOVELY!!!!
I so love nature and this just brings it alive to the reader!
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Beautiful poem!
A lovely tribute to the natural world--devoid of the nastiness we humans put into it! Evocative imagery throughout, great use of sensory detail, too.
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ah, nature poetry...I love reading poems of this sort. This is a very good one two. Wonderful imagary.
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amazing images and thoughts. I really like,
damp like a secret war-time hero
very nice
blessings,
Michelle
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Fantastic imagery! I'm particularly fond of the 3rd stanza. Outstanding work!
~Pastel
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Very nice ~
I hope to see you join in my next contest ~
But.....please read the Rules!!!
This could have been a contender for a Trophy!
Bear ~
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You should frame that third stanza ... it oozes with imagery (an imagery-oozer!!). Very nicely penned ... all we need now is some bread to chuck at the ducks, eh?!
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