The things I did,
the words I said,
to you,my friend,
I regret them.
You extinguished my anger,
you lighted my hopes,
you cured my disease,
with your love and affection.
I wasn't there,
when you need a shoulder to cry on.
I took you for granted.
for that I'm sorry...
But sorry won't change anything.
Without you by my side,
my world became black and cold.
Now I realized,
you were my sun stone.
Still blaming myself,
grieving over your absence.
thinking I should have done something,
to lighten your burden.
Author notes
uhm..hope you like it...and thanks to danneh for correcting my errors...i choose option3,losing your best friend...
A contest entry
- regret by aliceramone.
500 points, ended June 8, 2007, 11 entries
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750 points, ended June 26, 2007, 20 entries
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Wow...
this is a beautifully written poem.
I'm really sad about your friend. It can feel awful when you think you could have done more for a friend before you lost him or her. But please don't blame yourself for anything. I like the lines
'Without you by my side,
my world became black and cold.
Now I realized,
you were my sun stone.'
Best of luck! -
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thx highwaytraveller...sumtimes i do still blame myself for his death...but his mom and my mom told me it's not my fault...i nvr really got over it...still miss him...he was the best damn thing ever happen to me,besides my family...
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a good write with a good flow...good imagery with emotions and regret,thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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This reminds me a lot of a friend of mine that I used to go to with all my problems, she's now in an institution. But I'm more angry at her now. Why wouldn't she tell me what was going on... But I'm also the same way. I'm the human therapist, the robot without a heart at times.. So everyone I know now, they come to me for advise, and I try to help, but sometimes, it hurts so much knowing they can fix things and I can't. That I lost my chance to be human.
you have a couple of errors. /To light(en) your burden/
/I should (have) done something/
/I wasn't there when you needed a shoulder to cry (on)/
/I regret (them)/ -
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thx danneh! really? so sorry to hear bout ur friend...yeah,i know...it hurts...anyway,thx for correcting my grammar...
take care,alright?and dun b to harsh on urself...may peace b upon u...
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