Bright, sunny, colourful day,
on my breast precious lay.
he was there...
and that made me nothing but gay
I opened my eyes and
before I knew it he was gone.
we walked through the park
my hand in his; his in mine
his voice so deep, so calm, so soothing
he was my heaven.
He looked into my eyes and smiled.
I looked into his and...boomboom..boomboom
my heart beat like a freshly tuned conga.
I was high on emotions....but
before I knew it he was gone.
White darkness,
black brightness.
blue air,
colourless sky
is what I see.
I'm floating,
I'm flying.
I'm dancing in the air
so happy!
No worries, no sorrow.
Just dancing, to the beat of peace.
I cast a glance upon the trees below.
And there, precious stands.
He falls to his knees
and i feel a chilling breeze.
he begins to weep beside the flowers
he's filled with sorrow.
But why?
Maybe I will ask him tomorrow.
But I won't.
He can't hear me.
Wipe your tears my sweet.
Keep smiling; I will be waiting.
And before I know it,
I am gone.
Please tell me what you think
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Sad but interesting write that has more within it that there seems on first reading.Well done, Ros
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great.Yes we all gone someday and somewhere all we have to do is hope that we return to our safe haven.dnt worry the good ones return.bitch
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high on emotions...
Wonderful! Very deep and thought provoking work my friend! Your poem speaks to me of sadness and of loss... and there is something dark and disturbing moving behind the words. The ending is quirky, powerful and very effective! Fine work!
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Am lost for words.this is too deep.
You have such a beautiful way with words!!!
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Thanx gal!
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Awesome poem, the rhyme scheme is all over the place, but whatever you did i like it, good write
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HEY THANX FOR THE APPLAUSE
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Wipe your tears my sweet.
Keep smiling; I will be waiting.
And before I know it,
I am gone.
These words made me stop and think , yes before you know it we are all gone leaving someone we love behind! Great job on this my friend
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