Refine my heart in heat of you love.
Hotter than the sun and white as a dove.
Mysterious elegant being!
Cant explain what I am seeing!
You are a consuming fire!
Salvation is my hearts desire.
Save me from my wicked nature.
Let me add up to the potential stature.
Casting away my stone cold heart.
Making it new something to call art.
You are my Lord and my God forever!
Seeing is believing but thats last as long as never.
With you my light and fire my enemies melt as candles.
I'm not even worthy to loose your sandals.
Bright and morning star.
Please draw near for I'm to far.
In darkness I fell.
In light Im am born.
Saved me from hell.
Because your flesh was torn.
No longer locked up or in a cell.
Punctured by the thorn.
The end is near I can tell.
The blind I so mourn.
Come Lord Jesus in Quickness of Fire!
Save us from the wicked mire!
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A contest entry
- ◄Show Me What You Got!!► by Hebz.
425 points, ended June 8, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - B.E.S.T. by buggirl.
700 points, ended July 3, 2007, 31 entries
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Good poem, I liked every line. Congradulations on your win, Keep up the great work. I liked the picture that inspired you to write this, I think you wrote it just very well.
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Good luck on the contest. Very well done although you might want to look at the punctuation...a lot of exclamation points and not too many commas. It seemed a bit more rushed that whats called for
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This dissappointed. The two line verses become lumpy and somewhat disjointed and totally destroy the flow which seems such a pity. Regards from,
Donald -
Aaww, it's lovely! thanks so much for sharing it! I loved it...not just the subject matter, but the rhythm and flow of the work were perfect.
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In general, I really like this piece, especially the rhythm and rhyme. Grammar is a little bit of a problem, but other than that I really respect you as a writer. Thanks for entering my contest.
Jen -
Wow... Wow...wow!!!! That is so.... Great!!!!!!! Do deep, so awesome and wonderful! That's amazing!!!
I'm at a total loss for words. This is fantastic!!! Great job sweetie! I LOVE IT!
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~Sissy B~
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WOW!!
Very Very Very Good Piece..Love it so much...
Thanks alot for entering my contest & Best of luck
GloriousGift
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