I wish I could hide myself
In my fantasy world,
And never to return
To the awful reality,
Cause since your soul left mine
My world has became
The worst nightmare,
Black fields with no lights
And monters giving me shakes,
The only way to get away
Is sleeping and dreaming
About my fantasy world,
Where fields become pink
And my prince is with me,
Where my pains become sweets
And you're kissing my lips,
But when the sun rises up
The world becomes true,
And lonely I am,
When I see next to me
There is noone to hug,
And I soon realize
You have left me behind.
A contest entry
- INVITE FOR MY FAVOURITES ONLY. by AliceinPoetryLand.
1800 points, ended July 12, 2007, 16 entries
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Honorable mention
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Bronze trophy winner
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you can feel the pain and hurt in this. when you write and it makes the reader feel, you have done a great job. thanks for entering.
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This was so well written, I almost feel I've been on a journey across those fields with you. This really grasped my attention from begining to end.
You summed up exactly what how I feel in the last two lines, every so often the feeling hits ou again. If this is written from your imagination (I noticed the other contest it was entered in) then well done!
Thanks for entering and good luck!!
Sunny
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This was so well written, I almost feel I've been on a journey across those fields with you. This really grasped my attention from begining to end.
You summed up exactly what how I feel in the last two lines, every so often the feeling hits ou again. If this is written from your imagination (I noticed the other contest it was entered in) then well done!
Thanks for entering and good luck!!
Sunny
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This was so well written, I almost feel I've been on a journey across those fields with you. This really grasped my attention from begining to end.
You summed up exactly what how I feel in the last two lines, every so often the feeling hits ou again. If this is written from your imagination (I noticed the other contest it was entered in) then well done!
Thanks for entering and good luck!!
Sunny
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Sweet
Your world is so beautiful, loving and sweet.ok..let me tell you something special about the poem, when i read this poem I read the last line as "You have left me belind."..and i enjoyed the poem very much.thanks for sharing your beautiful Fanticies
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AWSOME
I think this was awsome it shows good character and perfect imagination good job and keep up the good writing..
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I can feel your pain in these words. I hope you keep writing!
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A very sad write of one who has been left alone. I love your words and the imagery you have used to express these feelings.
Thanks so much for sharing with me
Gaylene
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A very open hearted piece of prose my friend. Tells of the sadness felt while the one your heart is intended for is absent of your hug. Great write, keep them coming.
oh, just a wee typo, 'Mon(s)ters'
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hummz , really it made me a bit sad and reminded me something . ok just leave it
it was so nicely penned
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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