the anger has faded
wished curses have left
some one could have been dead
and my life behind bars
the extent of rage
that one may possess
unable to control fate
one's sanity is the test
but i chose to rise
one chance of survival
a plot of indifference
as punishment plays internal
she-devil is cast aside
her partner moved on
i carry the burden
from all that went wrong
a child's love, my addiction
i'll never feel that again
but i will press forward
until i find all of them
envy engulfs me
as a mother kisses her child
lumps of tears swallow silently
as i wave and smile
i have compromized my life
false advertisement to the eyes
they see me smile happily
cuz they care not of my cries
(why should they?)
every day is a stride
a preparation for the unknown
a destination none other
than to bring them home
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This poem shows how much power you do have over your own destiny my friend, And it also shows that your heart and your soul are in the right place thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your work.
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This stanza speaks powerfully to me:
"envy engulfs me
as a mother kisses her child
lumps of tears swallow silently
as i wave and smile"
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Last line, "than" should be "then". If I haven't already told you, an english teacher has entered into my body and is trying to take over
So many lines and pieces of this are so strongly hitting me right now, but I love the ending. It's such a sorroful piece yet you've made it so uplifting and inspirational and in just one short stanza. Amazing job Mom, truly amazing.
Me.
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i love it. sad, yet hopeful at the same time if that makes sense (most of what i say usually doesnt
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i especially liked how u phrased this:
but i chose to rise
one chance of survival
a plot of indifference
as punishment plays internal
and the last verse:
every day is a stride
a preparation for the unknown
a destination none other
than to bring them home
beautiful. bravo...
~Bear~
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wonderful
I see the strength in you with this poem. I see the you that is now; never deviating from a path your heart drives you to follow. I really liked this, Dawn.
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A sad and touching write, but hold an essence of hope and resilience to never give up the fight. You have penned a wonderful piece and I pray you never lose your stride! ~Tia
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