Over the years, around an exhilarating circle
We went from strangers, to friends, to lovers
Then suddenly, before the sun could set
Our love had been extinguished, still smoldering
We went from lovers, to friends, to strangers
And I wrote you poems
My book of poems
Filled with lovely sonnets
Intelligent, heartfelt haiku's
And eloquent literature
My book of poems
Where I write about the breeze
Where I hide my secrets
Where I hide my dreams
Where every beautiful word
Is inspired by you
I cling to hope
And fear to let you know
Oh it grows and grows
I got to let it shine
Let my true self shine
Through free verse and rhyme
Well, I free my soul
In my book of poems
Try to shut the doors
While keeping my sensual flow
And you know I love you
I can see it in your eyes
And I told you how much I care
Never of the nights I cried
And although you don't like reading
I wrote you poems
Piece by simple piece
I try to piece together
Piece's of me
This painful and implicit epic
Of a lone boy's soul search
With an unpredictable ending
Told through elegant and graceful lyric
That seer into the soul
Slitting like a knife
In my book of poems
Hundreds of romantic love poems
Even when deep and profound
Or dark and confusing
A hint of my love is shown
Every beautiful word
And compassionate verse
Inspired by you
A contest entry
- Give Me Warm & Fuzzy! by StormGoddess.
425 points, ended June 15, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You really got under my skin with this one, for reasons that are probably due to my own vanity.
This reminds me of my past for two reasons:
1) I once had a couple of wonderful, idealistic, young writers fall in love with me. They wrote many poems, stories, and plays inspired by their devotion to me. I broke their hearts and the bonds were severed forever. I made them both bitter and destroyed the idealism and innocence that made them so special. I will never forgive myself for this.
2) I kept a book of poems about my first love. He was a source of constant inspiration (be it positive or negative). When I finally became disenchanted with him, I destroyed much of this work, however, the first few poems I posted on this site are the few surviving pieces about him.
Now, to stop being so self-centered! LOL.
Seriously, you are an amazing poet. I always find so much of myself in your work (and I'm sure dozens of other people do as well). You are able to take something obviously personal to you, and transform it into something universal that everyone can relate to.
Men like you are what makes love and living worthwhile.
I wish somebody would write a book of poetry about me now! I'm so jealous!
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Better watch out beautiful....
Keep talking to me like that and I may fall madly in love with you and start writing a new book...hahaha
Just kidding...I think
Beautfiul words from a beautiful girl...what a beautiful way to start the day
Thanks!!!
Hope to talk to you soon
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
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Hahaha.... now you're making ME blush and smile.
Hey, I have no objections.
I look forward to talking to you soon as well.
Take care hon!
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I can't even count the amount of poems anymore inspired by the man I love *or loved at the time, or used to love* Your words here really spoke to me, so much so I just got so overwhelmed with emotions because I have felt such love so many times. I have loved friends who ended up breaking my heart... yet still I loved them...despite the amount of tears they made me cry... This is beautiful ! I sincerely hope you continue writing, because your amazing!
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I too have had enough poems to make a book about someone who will never know about them. He's the one that sparked my writing to begin with. Whoever this girl is must have been very important to you to inspire such lovely work.
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She was very important to me...well infact she still is
And so are you
So glad to have have found you!!
I'll keep saying that I guess cause right now...Im just in awe
Thank you
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
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The person who inspired my writing is still important to me as well. He just hates me now I guess.
Thank you, I really enjoy your work.
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Everything had been inspired from you! Beauitful poem of a love lost, only pieces of you remain within the words that were written for her! ~Sie
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I'd love to read this book of poems. It sounds wonderful. Such personal poems are what gives poetry its beauty...
I wish I could find a better word than beauty.
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Thank you for letting me re-read this beautiful piece of work. You have really poured your heart out and I feel that you have improved the overall feeling. From your point of view I still feel that it is incredibly sad, but as far as the contest is concerned yes, I would have a warm fuzzy feeling had this been written for me.
Congratulations on the HM, well deserved.
Love Sue
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I honestly really love this piece. A feeling sadly I know too well *feeling such strong emotions but unable to truly set them free* Its a horrible, lonely, depressing feeling, but at the same time almost promotes such beautiful pieces of art such as this poem. I love the way this entire piece flows together, but if I had to pin point a verse I'd say the ending.
In my book of poems
Hundreds of romantic love poems
Even when deep and profound
Or dark and confusing
A hint of my love is shown
Every beautiful word
And compassionate verse
Inspired by you
This just truly touched my heart... Thank you for sharing this and writing this. I enjoyed reading
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wow babe this is so truly beautiful... i love your talent...
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Words penned from the heart, inner most secrets flood the page with unheard emotions. A poets release. We pen feelings and thoughts that we may not always be able to say just to let them free. Possibly in hopes that they be heard.
If viewed from your point of view this is a sad write. To have such feelings but never to let them free to the one who inspires them...your muse.
If viewed from my perspective...sad but honest write. For I too have penned many a word to free myself but never to have spoken the words to the one who was the muse.
If I were to be the one whom this was written about. Still a sad write. For they were words never spoken. Would I feel fuzzy inside knowing you felt the way you do? I suppose I would..to know that it was I who inspired such heartfelt emotions...but still sad for you never took the time to speak them..afraid to take the chance.
Well written...the following lines seemed to have made a great impact..almost as if personal. they are:
Told through elegant and graceful lyric
That seer into the soul
Slitting like a knife
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Hahahahaha......I thought you may like that.....
Personal is right
Thanks for reading
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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WOW!!!!!!!!!
"I cling to hope
And fear to let you know
Oh it grows and grows
I got to let it shine
Let my true self shine
Through free verse and rhyme"
I love this verse the most..But the whole piece is just great, for it's true & goes directly to the heart,deeply felt, & strongly kept in our minds...
Excellent Work..
Pen ON!!!!!!
Much Love!!!!
GloriousGift
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EMOTION!!!
Wonderful write!!! This poem simply oozes emotion!!! Job well done!!
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A very sad, beautiful and well thought out poem. There are certain parts which excel, but I wont list them and others which I feel let the poem down, but in all I loved the feel.
Good luck in the contest
Sue
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Please list the certain parts that let the poem down!!!
I need to know
Thanks for reading
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!
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I love the emotion that pulses off this piece, but it really feels more sad than anything. Still nice writing.
Thanks for entering and good luck
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Yeah I guess it is sad
But only cause you are reading it through my point of view
What about her...what if you were the one this was written about?
Would you be all warm and fuzzy then?
Just curious you know...sometimes...answers depend on the perspective
Thanks for reading
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If this was written for me, or the poems being written about me, then yes it would make things feel diffeently. I suppose I am reading it from your point of ciew because it is so much my point of view as well.
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Right on!!!!!
Thankyou so much....
Thankyou!
Much Love!
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Do you know that feeling, I don't know how to describe it, when your stomach kind of drops, or flips, or...wait, gets that butterfly feeling...yeah! Kind of like that! So much of this, from the third set on, gave me that feeling.
There seems to be truth between the lines, an unwritten messages and meaning within, I can see that and feel that. Is it hidden intentionally, or not known that it was even there to be found? Those are my immediate thoughts....pieces of you.
I can relate to so much of this, as I'm sure you know. It presents with an honesty and therefore, I would never think you should change a thing.
Among my favorite:
'Where I hide my secretes
Where I hide my dreams
Where every beautiful word
Is inspired by you'
Until later...
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