A moment’s pause is all it takes,
And she’s back again.
Swimming behind his eyes,
Loving between his ears.
His heart drowning in the lies,
Her body floating on his tears.
He plays guitar,
And tells the truth.
He loves a girl who's lost in refuse.
Lonely time passes.
He’s just existing now.
Author notes
"I'll leave the light on for you" I used the photo
A contest entry
- A few different options, Everyone welcome! by Brucie.
450 points, ended June 12, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I usually hate the whole "i'm going to put a line here, oh look aren't a clever! I'll put another one there!" thing, but it seemed to be the only way to get the rythm/feel that I want. Meh!
Comments
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Nicely done and congrats on the bronze!
I have to agree with your line rant. Usually random line spacing annoys me, but it really fit well with this. Great job and kudos!
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Great
I love this, and at first I didn't like the way you've spaced your lines, but as I read it I realised that it is vital to the piece. Well done, and thanks for entering.
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