How silent is the night when I can’t sleep,
and thoughts retrace the paths of yesteryear.
Sometimes an uphill climb forever steep;
I wonder how I got from there to here.
Why do we like to take the route that seems,
so simple when we first are starting out?
And often led by chasing fruitless dreams,
down roads that always twist and turn about.
But would we change a thing when looking back?
I doubt we’d want it any other way.
Had I the chance I’d take the same old track,
and repeat the same mistakes of yesterday.
Life has its ups and downs for each, it seems.
But where would we all be without our dreams?
Author notes
An English Sonnet.
"Two roads diverged in a wood, and I took the one less travelled by, and that has made all the difference." Robert Frost
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Comments
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Fine English sonnet form
You have a nice enjambement here so, please, no comma. seems, => seems
And often => We're often [You need the finite verb 'are' in 'We're' as 'led' is a simple past participle.]
Well-constructed sonnet. Your ideas run counter to Robert Frost's poem on his forking road. He took the one less travelled by and claimed that made all the difference.
Your metaphor puts the choice differently but cogently. You would settle for well-beaten paths and avoid "fruitless dreams".
Thank you, poet.
Lyndon of the Winklings.
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Absolutely brilliant!
Beautiful and eloquently written! Your rhyme scheme is tightly written and flows well, with each line and punctuation mark contributing to the sound and feel. Very refreshing! It's nice to see such a mature piece.
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Simply amazing. The words are so well chosen, and fit so nicely with the quote. The rhyming is good.
Love it! Thank you and good luck in the contest.
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Good job
Good poem possum, it flowed ok and was smooth and had a story and just long enough. Congrats on the gold.
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OOh! Lovely and very full of poetic perfection! Gratzy on your shiny!
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Now this is amazing Exactly what I wanted to read. It quickened my pulse and took my breath exatly like I wanted. Welcome to the finalists
Much Love
Carrie
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Very beautiful sonnet, like the way you have laid this one out as well, makes it a little easier to read as it's not in bulk. I know about struggles, I am going through many at the moment but this is a very hopeful piece in my eyes and the strength behind words helps another to feel the stength within. Beautiful sonnet.
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very nicely done for sure. this group is collecting some wonderful poets. the rhyme pattern is what on a sonnet like this?..I could go look it up but I'm lazy today.. Scott
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this is so very true and so very well done.. i also would make all the same choices, pu t int he same situations.
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Its is so true that at times I have felt like things would be better if I could just go back and change certian things in my life, would I bw the same person today without all those hard experiences? everything I know is because I learnt it throughout my life so I can only dream for a beter future. Everyone has dreams and everyone owns thier dreams and that is a beautiful thing.
you wrote a beautiful piece
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Great
I really enjoyed reading it. I love sonnets as well and this is a good one. I sometimes wonder where we would be if we didn't have dreams and even though life can be like a rollercoaster, it works out in the end. Keep dreaming.
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So often, I think "if only I could go back to that one moment, I would do something different and everything would change." Take back a harsh word, make the first move, etc.
But the truth is, those moments have context, and if I were to go back and try again, I might patch one moment, but the overall situation would remain unchanged. I'd like to think I'm smarter now, but if that's true, it's only because of those mistakes.
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This is excellent
The thing for me is, that I dream and dream but my dreams never come true. Thought I was close recently but that, too, got blown away
Dreams come true for some people and that's an awesome thing; I hope your dreams come true for you...thank you for sharing this in the contest -
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I'm in love with the picture- okay now I must read
I think that the picture was perfect for the poem.
As well I really enjoyed it... The continue of questions made me think of the answers to them..
There arent too many poems that I read that I sit and think over.
This was very well written.
though I enjoyed the questions I think it kind of draws away from the poem. not much though, just a little.
Oh and I must add of how right you are so right with where would we be with out our dreams? It's sad how some people dont have teh chance to live or even have tehir own dreams
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The imagery and the words compliment each other fully. You hit on a topic that can be identified with by everyone and express it wonderfully.
Good luck in the contests you've entered! Blue
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I really like the message, this was simple in format and easy to read, thanks for entering.
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Great! I think is very true your last verse! Everyone has dreams so we wouldn't exist without dreams!
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I really like this. But it's not really expressing emotion, it's more about reflecting on your past and saying you're satisfied with everything you did. To me, satisfaction wasn't a strong emotion in this poem, and yet satisfaction is the emotion that I got out of the piece.
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Awesome
This is a very uniquely penned poem and I really liked how you just let it flow through out the poem. excellent flow and depth really adds appeal to the poem. good work all roudn and keep on penning away
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Exceptional
This sonnet is pretty well impeccable. Perfect iambic pentameter and just the right amount of subtle and well-placed assonance and alliteration. Really quite the treat to read, I must say. Best of luck in your contest.
David Michaels
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What can I say except perfect in every way hon.
Wonderful content which flowed beautifully. You have definitely mastered the sonnet form
I wish you well with this one.
Linda
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OK... good format and good message... thank you for entering.
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Brilliant
I love this poem! It's very truthful, and I feel like I can compare myself to it. The rhythm and rhyme flowed beautifully, the poem itself seemed to have a content/tranquil feel. Thanks for giving me a little bit of peace.
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Wonderful.
This is wondeful. I love the feel of the poem, calm and accepting. The last two lines are briliantly written. Indeed, I would not have my life any other way despite all of its ups and downs and I do still have my dreams. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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dreams are important though they can haunt us forever and ever and myself some paths i wish i could go back and redo but we cannot this i know this is a lovely piece
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i like this one very good keep up the good work!!!
stevie
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I love the line "And thoughts retrace the paths of yesteryear". It really fits with the tracks through the stubble in the picture. It's a good poem. I liked it. I think lots of people could relate to it. Congrats.
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I am no one, if I cannot dream.
I love it. VEEERY well done. Great job. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in your contest and life. Take care. I'll talk to you later. -
This is very beautiful, definitly beautiful. I loved everything about the poem. The words, the lines, th message, everything. Excellent job. Hope you win!
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I like this comforting piece of work
One can feetl the love and understandg of what we al would do. I do believe that God see it that way too.
It isn't that we are dumb. We want to see where we are ane where we came from and them do it all over again on any one day.
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Very true indeed We do need our dreams. They are something that nobody can take from us. Well done on this one, and I wish you all the best in this contest
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