Feel my heart beating through my viens
Every part of me you touch is pulsing with angst
Standing against you with your back to the wall
Wrapping my arms around you i can feel my skin start to crawl
I lean down and give you a tender loving kiss
To distract you from what i'm going to do next
I grasp your upper thighs and slide you up to my level
To my surprise you wrap your legs around this devil
You can feel me below throbbing with lust
One nibble of my ear and i push forward with a vicious thrust
I lay you to the floor and remove all your cloths
Expose your body and my emotions begin to flow
Feeling your passion as you look into my eyes
Pleasure sweeps your body as i thrust fingers between your thighs
Every breath you take makes my expression sore
I keep the pleasure churning till you beg for more
You say you want me now, but you won't get that yet
I kiss my way down your body making you nice and wet
I grip your sides and taste your silky pink flesh
The more i go the more wet and delicious
I can hear you moan and groan want me to stop?
Your fingers in my hair tells me your jaw is about to drop
You quiver and shake and you erupt with force
Barely able to see you roll me over for the second course
You kiss me at first then work your way down
You remove my pants before you go to town
As it rizes from my body like a beast from the depths
Tease and taunt it using nothing more then your fingertips
Time for you to play, can you make me feel it back?
Tongue up and down my skin and i can feel hair standing on my back
I reach down to make you feel pleasure again
Your so wet and sensitive one touch drives you insane
You crawl atop me and place it just under yourself
You take one look at me to make sure i'm ready for whats felt
Slowly you come down and I can feel you from within
Your body sweating and perfect from the dim light i can grin
Sliding slowly in and out I feel about ready for it
You tighten up about to come as i'm stroking your clit
You stop moving, all the way in
I flex all my muscles as i inject you with sin
You fall to my side, catching your breath
My heart aching i can't stop thinking of your perfect breasts
This feels so good i'm almost in pain
I look into your eyes, want to do it again?
A contest entry
- Crimson Carnage of Lethal Lust by DayDreamMuse.
1560 points, ended January 28, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think and if this made you feel as good as it made me feel
Comments
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You write erotica very well! Very well indeed.
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Excellent prose her, with the exception of a couple of minor spelling glitches and a couple of your rhymes were slightly off, but overall, this is what I am looking for in my contest...thanx, poet...
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Very potent in its action and rapid flow.
The rhyme could use a bit of tightening...
otherwise, I found it enjoyable and to theme.
Blue
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Well this is definitely something. I am left gapping as well. Now if that isn't wild and physical lust I don't know what that is. Powerful and long, it definitely turned on. The rhyme and rhythm are fine, but the flesh/delicious one didn't work out. may be changing it to skin or body to find a better way to rhyme would be a solution.
~DD~
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You tighten up about to come as i'm stroking your clit
You stop moving, all the way in
I flex all my muscles as i inject you with sin
Thats what life is made of!
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wow i luv it
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Thank you
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Well turned me on. I loved the starting part "Feel my heart beating through my viens
Every part of me you touch is pulsing with angst
Standing against you with your back to the wall
Wrapping my arms around you i can feel my skin start to crawl
I lean down and give you a tender loving kiss
To distract you from what i'm going to do next
I grasp your upper thighs and slide you up to my level
To my surprise you wrap your legs around this devil" Simply perfect! Well done!
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WOW. Bravo! My eyes are huge, my jaw is dropped, and my blood is flowing with desire. Such exquisite animalistic lust. Such brazen, burning, beautiful desire. This is a flawless piece. Sensual perfection!
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Thats almost the same thing i had to say when i seen your pictures...
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Now I know you are teasing me!
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